Sane

So much doubt and no where to hide

Feel so trapped inside my own mind

Then he looks at me and I smile like I've been drinking whiskey shots

And when we kiss my stomach gets all tied up in celtic knots

My gypsy heart burns with desire

Like its been reborn from the ashes and flames of phoenix fire

I don't cry with him by my side

Hope he never says good-bye

This girl once so consumed with darkness and pain

In his arms now only feels safe and for once sane

Reviews

[Aura]

One right person can make all of the sadness that we feel disappear. This poem depicts that without proper care and love, an individual can go insane. That one person who sticks with you, loves you just the same is the one who makes sure you won't go insane, keeping your sanity intact. Truly they can be a blessing, seeing you for what you really are, someone unique, with an imaginative mind perhaps. Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed reading!

[Lovecraft]

Good poem. I especially loved the Phoenix in this as I'm obsessed with mythological creatures. The structure is formed nicely.
But you should make more love poems that are much darker in nature, you might do quite well.

[Zorro Tomoko]

I love your figurative language and your writing a whole lot, but I think that it would sound better if the poem had pauses between "feels safe And for once" and "sane" It would sound better if you finished with that right after a pause.

[terry smith]

I can't believe more people haven't read this! Very good writing!