A Ghosts New Host

its kinda strange. based on a book i just read. its about a ghost who escapes from hell. hope you like it :)

His crys kick the cobblestone over.

His tombstone is shattered as two

straggly, gnarly, gnashed hands

appear.

His hands grasp onto the side.

He flips over,

losing his balence.

He looks down to the rotten coffin

praying for someone new, then

POOF!

Hes in your room, ghasping for a breath.

Are you scared yet, young one

for he could be with you.

The ghost ascaped from hell

can you?

Author's Note

please dont be to harsh if you dont like it. and if you just absolutly hate it, dont review at all.

Reviews

[Kat]

Creepy poetry but i really like it :)! good job keep it up!

[Mahigan]

I agree with sherwin. You're at a good spot right now for your age group. Find synonyms for your everyday words and substitute them in. There is a lot of potential in your writing.

[sherwin]

I think your at the right point for your age. Just keep challenging yourself with subject material, imagery, etc. Those are the building blocks. A good thing to learn is that craft is second to creativity. Keep it up.

[Mashairi]

whoa. i love creepy poetry and this one is on this dot. well done :D

[Miu]

Eppp! It's a scary one but very good. Now im not going to be able to go to sleep tonight.......