Fear

.I might actually go back and redo this i feel like i could make it better just not in a thinking mind now.

Do your lungs fear the sickness.

 

Against those poisonous bloody vessels you cry out in vein.

 

Why must life always end at death.

 

Does your mindless attempt mean anything to fearless.

 

I could trade an eye for you heart.

 

You would be blind.

 

I would be heartless.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

kinda hard to really understand it.

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

intense and clever word play really drives the emotional striations of the poetic deeply into the mind~

[EvilAngel]

I like.you've got an interesting way of writing.love the last 3 lines.and the first 4 as well.hehe

[Solidad]

This is a good one =)

Ps- In your second like change 'them' to 'those'.

Wow.
Amazing imagery.
The emotion lies thick beneath the words.
Wonderful job.
Keep it up!

[Linear]

Not really hard to see that you would give your life for her to be free