Warriors.

Well.

Darkness spreads around the sky above us,

So we pass our glances' of goodbye.

No one said a word.

No one made a sound.

We knew it ended here and we accepted that.

Author's Note

not the type of writing i usualy do but i thought maybe give it a try see how it works out. plus my grammar is bad so those ; don't even know if they go there. :)

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was very powerful. I loved that it was short, but still could feel emotion within it. I loved it. Thanks for sharing. :D

[Nicholas]

Short and powerful.

[T. J. Blackburn]

I like this poem better than your others. I think you've started something with this one. Write more of this. As for this one: polish it up and it'll shine. I like the title also.

Suggestions:

Try present tense. I think it'll give it a sense of immediacy.
Semi-colon's work but not the best choice.
The third line could probably combined into a stronger sentence.
her=here?

[Solidad]

Simple and eloquent aside from the fact that 'glance's' should be 'glances' this was amazing. You didn't drown the reader with over embellishments. Some writers don't know how to do that. Bravo =)

[Jae]

its interesting. I found this piece lovely and thought provoking. Also i liked the style. You should write more things like this. Good job.

~Rem