Witch hours.

This was a expereince for me, scientifically its where your brain wakes up but your body stays asleep, other would say whitch hours.

The night is silent.

Not one body but my own is in the room.

sleeping deep, so deeply.

To awake in this time known.

The time of the witch, the demons.

Not being able to move a muscle.

But my eyes and brain stay awake as my body sleeps.

Struggling to move, trying to scream for help,

 Nothing but a silent whisper.

I break free and scream the first named to come to mind.

I hear the voices above me, chanting in there own silent whisper.

 

 

 

Author's Note

i really need a second opinion on this one. kinda of more of a short story maybe...dont know.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

This would be a excellent opening to a tale of mystery and fear. I like the set-up of a possibility of a good story to follow. A very good ending to a very good poem.
Coyote

[Black Cat Fever]

Very frightening when this happens. You paint a very chilling picture of a very real situation. I think you did a great job. A story can be in poem form too.

[Celeste21]

Another name that old folks use is a witch/devil is riding you. A sort of sleep paralysis. I have experienced this too and it is quite alarming! My mind would be on the brink of sleep and I hear voices/ ppl arguing, but would be conscious enough to know I wasn't completely asleep... Edgar Allen Poe has a poem abt this strange occurrence also. Interesting piece.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was a good poem. I really liked it. It was twisted and creepy. I liked it though. I think this could be a short story. Work with it a little bit. I liked the imagery in the poem as well. Thanks for sharing. :D