Our Friendship

I don't care if you just graduated, it doesn't excuse your childish ways.

You don't look so hot

When you pretend to be something you're not,

When you play them mind games that drive me crazy

And then you act so lazy

About it. And you say you care about my feelings,

But our friendship's retreating

And my love for you has died

Because all those sweet words were lies.

 

Our friendship was fake.

I don't know why I'd make

Such a big deal about it;

So much that I would throw a fit

When things didn't go right,

We used to be so tight,

But now you act so lame

Now our friendship isn't the same.

 

You're so pathetic and a loser

Now you'll think "Why did I ever lose her?"

But I'll never take you back

Because there's some things you lack,

Such as sensitivity and maturity,

Not to mention continuity.

And I'm done,

This game just isn't fun.

Author's Note

What do you think?
I was pretty mad, could it use work?

Reviews

[misha]

this was a great piece. i could feel every bit of your anger in it. Great job!!

[dreaming dame]

:) Perfect. If you were to change it, I think it would lose the original feeling. In my opinion, intense feeling poems are the best. :)

[Bailey C. Writing]

Our frienship was fake.
*Friendship. Noticed the typo :)

This was great. I could tell that you must have been pissed. Writing really is the best way to express yourself hmm? And you did a good job of it here.

[Silent Knight]

it good. i like it, btw pain meds are make me sleepy so i wont remember this. mail me to read it again pleeze.

[brenda]

:o ..... it is really good !;) and nope its amazing !:)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the flow of the words and the purpose. Direct and honest words made the poem strong and the point clear in the words. Last line is true. When people play games with your heart and mind.
"This game just isn't fun."
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[~Lizzy♬]

Yes! I loved this poem. The hurt and anger definitely poured throughout the poem! :) Wonderful write! It doesn't need any work...

~Lizzard~