la vie en rose .... not so much

this poem has a very saddening and a gloomy aspect

gazing at the hollow ceiling

fighting the treacherous feeling

loosing every last hope of healing

scorning the wrongful fate

growing with malice hate

waiting for the expected date

ending his misery

leaving his agony

cutting his artery

Reviews

[Hannah]

Hauntingly beautiful, every word charged with emotion and melancholy. The rhyme and title suit this poem perfectly as well, good work!

[Latifa]

thank you for the review dear.

[Pryde Foltz]

Tough stuff. The title is lies in wicked irony to the pome. Awesome.

[gombeggar]

very good rhyme ...but seeing far 2 many suicide note poems here of recent...waste of good writing skills

[WithLoveandLoss.]

Your rhyme literally was finessed. Every line falls impeccably, I envy your style :) Very emotionally charged and I thoroughly enjoyed

[Latifa]

thank you dear for the kind review

[Joyce S. Greene]

I wouldn't want to make you made, that's for sure! A strong poem that speaks very loudly of intense anger. Hopefully, this was only your muse blowing off steam.

[DrD]

Dark and heavy but with that solemn resolve that makes poetry come alive. Well done.

[Latifa]

thankyou drD i appreciate it

[Mike Emil]

it's good to scorn others
not done enough for my like
it this is suicide
that is a foolish thing
not worth a saki ride
HAI!!!

[Lydia Shutter]

Powerful words here. The anger is intense and the intent is well expressed. I liked this....empowering. Lydi**

[Latifa]

thanks love

[Leslie Philibert]

I really admire the way you write in a second language. You are, very, very good !

[Latifa]

thank you lestie for your kind words