clarity

sometimes thing seems so blurry that you just have to take a stand and rethink

Whirl around whirl

Whirl into the endless swirl

To find the elixir pearl

In a delicate moment of placid whim

When the sunbeams have come to dim

And the moon saluted with striking grin

With countless stars you rally your sin

Repent from the devouring hymn

Picking yourself from the slippery brim

Making the everlasting vow

Turning the table now

Rising from the burdening bow

Beating the odds no matter how

Reviews

[Hatchling]

Beautiful poem! I like the flow of this. Keep up the great work

[Latifa]

thank you dear

[Hatchling]

You're welcome

[Neon]

Very nice rhythm with the beautiful frame of words. I liked the theme you chosen to write on it. Good job, now i must say, your raising in the field of writing. Keep writing on.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[MsJewel]

Wonderful use of imagery in this uplifting poem. I love the feeling it left me with after reading!

:) Julie

[Latifa]

thanks honey so much

[Coyote Poetry]

"And the moon saluted with striking grin
With countless stars you rally your sin"
I like your use of the language. Each lines of create thoughts and visions. I like the above lines a lot. I like the desire and the flow of the poem. A strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Latifa]

thank you dear

[rutherford]

Wonderful imagery, alliteration and crafted writing. On a deeper level, this piece gives the reader much to think about. The idea of repenting and pushing on is powerful. Also, the short explanation is helpful and interesting in itself--losing focus on something is a good time to stand back. Well done.

[Latifa]

thank you for the read

[Pryde Foltz]

You write such deep and uplifting pieces. Write on, Latifa. Write on.

[Latifa]

thank you dear

[wordman]

the rhyme was right on good job

[Latifa]

thank you so much

[ThoughtsofShyann]

This was really nice and well done!

[Angel]

Very nicely done............

[Latifa]

thank you sis

[Joyce S. Greene]

Your poem reads very well, Latifa. Very well done.

[Latifa]

thank you Joyce