Hungry spirits

loneliness is a dread,to find the one is tough especially in a time full of masked faces.

Deserted hearts sought to be dovetailed

Deserted hearts sought to be overwhelmed

Deserted hearts are in fear to wane

Deserted hearts are in want to reign

The vain spirit is growing tender

The vain spirit is willing to surrender

The vain spirit is gleaming with desire

The vain spirit refuse to douse the fire

Reviews

[Scott Mou]

I love this poem, my favorite line is

Deserted hearts sought to be overwhelmed

Keep Up The Good Work

[Neon]

I liked the flow of the rhythm you held into the piece.
Keep on!

[Anand Sehgal]

The vain spirit is gleaming with desire
The vain spirit refuse to douse the fire

that's the spirit.
Loved the write dear :)
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[Mike Emil]

mike emil approves
this is ripe for kohlrabi theater
HAI!!!

[Mark]

The human want and need to be coupled is the source of much joy and pain. I'm not a fan of a repetitive verse, but I can sense the emotions in this.

[Solitary Traveler]

I like this poem, but a good way to take out the repeated words is to start the stanza with the words you want to repeat. Such as - The vain spirit ...... (here you go to a new line, and start your poetic verses). It will make people read your poem, instead of glancing over it. I had to stop myself from glancing, and I'm glad I did.

[Pryde Foltz]

The vain spirit is gleaming with desire
The vain spirit refuse to douse the fire

Some very tight verse but yes perhaps just a little too heavy on the repeat. Loved the closing lines.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, but I feel you have to be careful not to overdo repeats, use this way very sparsely !

[wordman]

a great job and I liked the vain spirit that refuses to put out the fire