REBIRTH

 scourging atrophy have pervaded my soul

and life is eroding

I imbibe the source

 of the crystalline waters

to savor the truth

I fondle with clay

to find my beginnings

  Resuscitated by sweet breaths of clemency

I cripple my way back to rebirth

but I must choose wisely

for the pearl of the renascence

is in disguise

 and the wobbling bridges wont hold much longer

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

the wobbling bridges won't hold much longer. Love that line.

[raj24]

its beautiful... rebirth in itself is a question.. whether we really want it or not and what we want in it.. sufferings of this life make us weak and we find it hard to digest the reality.. beautifully written with the use of nice words.. great work Latifa..and i really liked your name too.. thanks for sharing :)

Raj

[Latifa]

thank you for the kind review raj 24

[Namrata]

Oh, you definitely must choose nicely.

[Amduscia]

Absolutely stunning piece of poetry. Well written.

[Latifa]

thank you for reviewing my humble piece

[Alfred Kukitz]

Terrific writing Latifa. Your skill level, vocabulary and ideation are remarkable. Is Algeria culture oppressive? I ask because your writing echoes a mirror on your world.

[Latifa]

thank you for your wonderful writing, and to answer to your question I think that our country have a long journey into understanding the meaning the human freedom specially for women cause even though the algerian woman can do what ever profession she wishes which is a wonderful thing, the whole social mentality is still centuries behind, and I know for a lot of fox in the western society they usually think that is associated to religion but thats not the case at all cause religion itself is wrongly understood and it is even recently for me that I have begun to truly understand this religion that Im bound to.

[Alfred Kukitz]

For a 22 year old you are way ahead of your time. Perhaps you should endeavor into novels about your cultures religion, women in society and Algeria's place in the world.

[Latifa]

yeah, that's actually my ultimate goal concerning writing but I'm still a very much a beginner in novels but I am intending to post some short stories very soon inshallah so that I can get more constructive point of view.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I can hardly wait!

[John Anderson]

This is like a breath of fresh air, so beautifully inked. Poetry is all this! A finely penned poem!

[Latifa]

thank you for your kind review

[Ruth]

Wonderful imagery and message - potent as ever love...blossoming isn't easy and must be paid attention to, as you do here, excellent! x

[Latifa]

thank you for the review darlin

[Leslie Philibert]

not only a fine vocabularly, but a clever layout that adds to it..well done !

[Latifa]

thank you for the review Leslie

[Coyote Poetry]

Rebirth. A needed thing for the all of us.
"I fondle with clay
to find my beginnings
Resuscitated by sweet breaths of clemency
I cripple my way back to rebirth"
I like the above lines. Create visions and thoughts by the strong statements. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Latifa]

thank you for reviewing

[Sami Khalil]

Your rebirth is chosen wisely as the words of this wonderful poem. We cross the bridge when we are ready and willing. Excellent dear poet...:)..........

[Latifa]

thank you Sami aidakom mobarak

[Sami Khalil]

You too. You are welcome...:)................