Envy

my very first senryu

Gritted teeth of ire,

she sips  her envy basking,

sickened by laughter.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Your words amaze me.. these three lines, and yet a whole world of life here. One can feel the suffering, the aching music of the laughing. So powerful. Thankful you are back with us.

[Manel]

a perfect description of a girl in certain situation use few words but they reflect so much details, emotion and visuality thank you for sharing
amazing job Latifa i loved it

[Sami Khalil]

A standing ovation. Glad to see you back.

[Neville]

By Jove, I think she's got it....It takes a lot of skill to say so very much in so few words 10/10

[Latifa]

thank you for the review Neville.

[ANTO]

Very intriguing Latifa - I see a scarlet woman intent on driving a wedge between two lovers who are laughing which makes her so jealous and determined to have her own wicked brand of fun lol
I liked this - your first senryu - it read smoothly (though Im not very experienced with this form of late).
Great experimentation my friend
:)

[Latifa]

thank you for the review :)

[Angad Waraich]

I never expected to see something such as envy brought out in just three lines.
Masterful writing.
Lovely piece.

Thank you for sharing.
-Angad

[Latifa]

thank you so much for the uplifting review

[MomzillaNC]

So much said of the way envy poisons the heart and soul of us… yet, in so very few words.

[Madison O'Dwyer]

Wow. That first line is absolute perfection and the poem follows suit. Lovely! Thanks for sharing.

[Robert Strzalko]

Strong words that bring out the title well.

[Baby Ricochet]

Envy's a mo fo, That's for sure.