Envy

my very first senryu

Gritted teeth of ire,

she sips  her envy basking,

sickened by laughter.

Reviews

[Anne Timmins]

This is a very nicely written piece

[Alfred Kukitz]

Cut to the bone good. You can feel the tension! Nice work!

[Blake Fodor]

Emotive work and well written piece

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem gave me a chill. There was something frightening beneath the surface.
Masterful use of emotion.

[Pryde Foltz]

An excellent senryu for its depth of understanding and expression. I do think you need a comma between envy and basking. Otherwise loved it.

[Mary Bosworth]

this grasped at my attention and my mind..I love it!

[Shaquana Adams]

This was captivating, which is a lot to accomplish in a short poem. Great job girl!
-QuanaWana

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[Mayank]

It kicked my gut... would that be enough?

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[Leslie Philibert]

Perfectly written , kept to the syllable count..an accomplished poem !

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[wordman]

sounds like she wants to get even