rusting twilight

I lovve haikus

                                               

Life rusting twilight,

mindfully beaking darkness,

shrugging off the days.

Reviews

[Saddam]

Yes, it is.
Like the haiku which came out very powerfully.
Thanks for sharing it.

[Ruth]

I love this :) The conciseness is powerful here, gorgeous hon :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is short, but profound. It caused my mind to expand.

[Alessander]

Nice first line.
Love the idea of life rusting something.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I veer into mind & soul peaking into the joy of my soul.

Great write!

Regards,
Al

[Emily]

Love it!
Keep on writing!!

[zaisham9393]

what I love about Haiku poems is how it metaphorically connects emotions with nature .This one is awesome :)!
Thank you for sharing!

[Latifa]

thank you for the review :)
that is why I love haikus too

[Lyn Anderson]

This is really beautiful. The power of Haiku is in few words to elicit emotion and imagery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a dazzling haiku...love the last line of "shrugging off the days"

read the middle line as "breaking"..did you mean that?

j.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review, but no i intentionally ment beaking, as metaphor when the bird is beaking the wood gently

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh i love that.....yes.

[An owl on the moon]

I love how poetry can make a moment come alive in your mind, and yours does this so fluidly. These twilight moments are my favorite, living between day and night. Beautifully voiced.

[Latifa]

ooh thank you craig :) happy new year