Upriver

A poem about the millennial generation... from a millennial.

Gray hairs on young heads.
No heads on their beds,
but meds in their heads.

With heads in their books, laptops, and phones,
their bodies are made up of caffeine and bones.
An army of zombies, an army of clones,
They play with their toys and their toys play with drones.

I don't mean to drone, the message I'll deliver.
The ones who work for nothing
forever swim upriver.

Reviews

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Whoa!!
Intelligent!
Such works are highly loved, especially by youth.
It convinces me that kids who grow mature before time are of course floating.. I'm a live example even tough I'm not sure.
Wonderful allusion, imagery.
Thank you for sharing!

[Brent]

I'm glad you didn't find the tone to be too condescending! Definitely wanted to communicate that purpose is important in people's work.

Thank you for pointing out this poem's message!

[Tazeen Ahmed]

You're always welcome!

[Tracey~]

I'm glad I grew up in a time where we went barefoot outside and ran and played in rivers. Played softball and had an hour of tv at the end of the day if the chores were done lol.. Point well made...xo

[Brent]

Oh so nice to reminisce about that! Now kids/teens lives are heavily virtual: TV, video games, social media, etc. for hours on end..with no chores!

[Brent]

And thank you for your childhood memories!

[Tracey~]

Your very welcome..

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funny ,playful and critical to society. In very good form of poetry.

[Brent]

I tried to not be overly harsh, but exaggeration does get the best response...Glad you enjoyed the critique of society.

Thank you for your nice review!

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I think we should be critical with kind heart. Great poem my friend.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Not my desire and why I just left my last post.
Too much pressure in our world is causing a pressure cooker inside our heads and we weren't born to be just this!
Yes, conveyed it well here.

[Brent]

Wow, I'm glad the poem rings so true for you. Yeah there's a lot of tension between one's responsibilities to society and to one's health. Glad you moved on from work that was detrimental to your happiness.

Thank you for sharing your story!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!