Bitter Butter, Battered Truth

A nonsensical poem about life.

Little dribble, aching tooth.

Waiting for an open booth.

Little spittle, spotted hare.

Eagle diving on a dare.

Teeny, tiny, tilted town

off the edge and sliding down.

Curdled milk and spoiled youth.

Bitter butter, battered truth.

Author's Note

Just having some fun with the rhyme scheme. What do you think of the imagery?

Reviews

[Arantza]

I loved it! This is the kind of poem that will make you smile a your read it. Had a lot of fun reading it, and I bet you had a lot of fun writing it. I liked the imagery in the third couplet and I how each idea on the last couplet were somehow connected.

[Brent]

Very nice of you to say for my "nonsense" poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it! I actually wrote it while extremely bored, which is probably why it's so ridiculous. I like to connect how all things are connected on some level, whether or not we realize it.

Thank you for your insightful review!

[Kate Z.]

Someone could build a whole philosophy on your "fun." I love it.

[Brent]

I would be impressed if they could! Thank you and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm always surprised how much philosophy is ingrained in art (music, literature, etc.) Of course, artists can mostly get away with it because it's "just art".

[Kate Z.]

But think of the popularity of Lewis Carroll - or Dr. Zeuss, for that matter!

[Brent]

Very true! In nonsense lies some sense.

[Gee]

Nonsense, but well written nonsense

[Brent]

Indeed it is nonsense! I was thinking if I can even make nonsense sound halfway decent, I'm doing something right.

Thanks for your review!

[Nolo Segundo]

This is very, very good--pithy and symbolic!

[Brent]

Thanks! I was just having some fun with word play. Gotta mix things up some times, you know.

[Cory Barrett]

So fun! Thanks for the write

[Brent]

Great, I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for your kind words!

[John Sabado]

I loved it. I would have rated this higher as I love these type of poems, except for the fact that it was nonsensical. Dont get me wrong I write a lot of nonsensical things. I just had to re-read your poem like two or three times before i realized it was nonsensical. Lol

[Brent]

No problem, anything I publish on WC is fair game for constructive criticism! I'll be publishing clearer poetry in the future.

Thank you for your review and helpful pointers!