I hate myself

another me

I hate myself
for ignoring the pain
for hiding these tears
during the rain

I hate myself
for being so dumb
waiting for love
I know would not come

I hate myself
for lying to my own
I know love's still alive
yet pretend it's done

I hate myself
for I know it's true
that I'm still a fool
hoping you'll love me too

Reviews

[emipoemi]

aww.....right in time for Valentine's Day. Very touching and very fluid. Every beat packs a good punch. If you don't mind that I tweak a little: "hiding THESE tears" (you have "tears" in plural and therefore the pronoun must be plural too); "I know would NOT come" ("never" doesn't flow too well, and it be help the musicality more as "not" and not "never"); and finally: "myself" is one word. Other than that, simply well done! Much enjoyed this one!

[Brigg Aries]

thank you very much.

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.