Do you?

What do you do
when the one person
you cared about
no longer calls you drunk 

at four in the morning?

Or holds you tight
and kisses the places
behind your knees.

How do you fall asleep at night
knowing you’re not the last thing
on their mind as they
pull the sheets over their body
and reach for their lover?

And when you pretend to be strangers
the next time you see their face
do you go home and cry
on your bathroom floor
because it’s over 

or because it never really was?

Author's Note

Any criticisms will be appreciated

Reviews

[Lobster Goldberg]

Love it! This is a classic love lost poem. The last line is a powerful statement.

[Briony Bryant]

Thank you so much, thanks for reading!

[LL]

There is another flower in the field with beauty and a sweeter smell than ever before.

[Briony Bryant]

Thanks for reading!!

[LL]

Your welcome 😊

[Antonio Valentino]

you weep and then at some point, move on.. with one more scar that heals into wisdom..

knowing that life just sometimes, sucks

if we let it

enjoyed this, thanks for sharing
Antonio

[Briony Bryant]

Thank-you for reading!

[Antonio Valentino]

and thank you as well for letting us..

:)

[Wolfwind]

This piece for me resonates like life is just a dream and reality is some fleeting ripple within the mirror reflected image of our inner minds. I think break ups cause sorrow, by nature of two pieces being torn apart. It's practically one of life's little non-convienent truths. I believe we all have the power to act in reaction to sorrow in what ever way we wish. Some crawl under their covers and remain in the fetal position for weeks. Others go out and laugh and scream and through boulders into the sea, while drinking margaritas. I guess the outcome of broken hearts is just as crazy as love itself.

Technically, I can say that I felt the piece could be tightened up a bit here and loosed out in other lines to make the flow a bit smoother... But, as it stands it's fine too.

Personally, the last two lines really were a wonderful ending. It leaves us in a place echo and mental musing. Always a great place to be at the end of a poem.

Great Ink! Thanks for sharing!
Aaron - Wolfwind

[Briony Bryant]

In what lines specifically do you think I could have tightened it up?

And thank-you! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and leaving your comments!

[Horizons]

A clear-sighted poem you constructed and shared with others, it's a pain in the write that's floating and the love's not coming outside perfectly, i got it in the poem. Some think the love's only for a joy and they spoil the others life sometimes but some people believe in love that it's for whole life making everyone happy and smiley without giving hurt. So, in the poem, i've got some pain of love and the questioning's too nicely expressed in the write which's further making a poem powerful with the great concept of. Well done!

[Briony Bryant]

Thanks for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Zan]

That's beautiful. In my opinion, there's honestly nothing you could do to make it better. Good job!

[Briony Bryant]

Thank-you so much!