I miss you

he's gone ): soooooo gone.

Please talk to me

Can't you see?

I don't know what to say,

to make this all go away.

I know there's something wrong,

but you haven't confided in me for so long.

I know I'm different,

but your message has been sent.

I'm trying to go back,

and regain the traits I lack.

A lot has happened,

but I need all the advice you can lend,

to go back to who I used to be,

so you can see the old me.

Do you remember that person?

We used to have so much fun.

I miss me and you,

and I think you miss it too.

I know it was awkward, with our past,

but I thought our friendship would always last.

I used to tell you everything,

and now everything I know is missing.

I feel so hollow,

because I could run away, and you wouldn't even think to follow.

There's a hole in my heart.

It wasn't there at the start.

It's that hole,

deep to my soul,

where you used to be.

 

 

Reviews

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

This sounds like some of the poetry I wrote when I first started to write. My advice to you is to keep writing - in fact, read more poetry than you write, get to know what style works for you and channel that pain and confusion into words. hunger for acceptance can be an amazing muse. best of luck, and sorry for any typos I missed :)

[Str8jacket]

This is so incredible. I've been in a similar situation. But people grow and grow apart...if you really want this person back apologize if you did wrong, don't if you didn't, but never ever change who you are!! People grow and they become different, it's a part of being human, if this person is worthy to be your friend (or whatever because I'm not aware of the specifics) they'll love the new you as much as the old. If they don't then they're not worth it. Now, if it's bad habbits their upset about then maybe it'd be to your benefit, but it's bad to let someone have too much influence on your life. I hope I'm not being too pushy, and I'm sorry if I am, but like I said I've been there and if I listened to myself this advice could probably help me. Again, I loved your poem. It's great, raw, and emotional :) Please continue.

[Prose-full]

i admire the vulnerability and inquisitiveness of the write.
i love--- "I feel so hollow,
because I could run away, and you wouldn't even think to follow."--it's genuis

"There's a hole in my heart.
It wasn't there at the start."---i love this unexpected rhyme...

this is a great write..smooth read..