always smile

got inspired and just made me smile big time :)

 always smile when things are always bright,

always smile when it dark at night,

because you look better when you smile,

a smile so big its like the river Nile,

smiling always makes people smile too,

so if you smile for me ill smile for you :)

Reviews

[Vanessa]

aw this made me smile :) I really needed it today too. - Vanessa

[yuki]

that's why I write to make people smile haha thank you for the review :)

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!
..]

Ummm....You forgot to put the Apostrophe in the "I'll" of the last sentence "so if you smile for me ill smile for you"

[yuki]

oh I forgot that thank you! ill have to fix it tomorrow

[Arisu]

usually I don't like rhymes that much in poems, but this was...it was...SOOOOOO CUTE! waaaaaa it really makes on smile!

[yuki]

haha thank you arisu-chan :)

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

cute and sweet.



Thank for sharing this sweet piece.


blessings. Kindred poet

[yuki]

thank you for the review! :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome. It's my pleasure. blessings. kindred poet

[Lucy Morningstar &heart..]

its very sweet and cute, but some of the rhymes are a tad childish; it has a lot of potential though. I like how short it is; sometimes short is better because it conveys the message better than longer poems.

[yuki]

yea I have a very childish heart so I do easy rhymes :P and thank you

[Draven]

So sweet. : ) Really cute.

[yuki]

thank you :)

[Bluefire]

"a smile so big its like the river Nile,"
Suggestion-> "a smile so big it's like the river Nile,"
~*~
"always smile when it dark at night,"
Suggestion-> "always smile when it's dark at night,"
~*~
"so if you smile for me ill smile for you"
Suggestion-> "so if you smile for me I'll smile for you"
~*~
Anywho, that stuff doesn't matter much.
It's the message that's great in this.
I love it! =3
It's cute.
Well done!

[yuki]

thank you for catching my errors im very grateful :) and im glad you love it :)

[Bluefire]

You're welcome. =3

[Jackson H. Harley]

Great poem with a timeless message, love it :)

[yuki]

:) im glad you like it :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Love, love, love, love this poem. Beautiful and it flows very well together. :-)

Kaze~ :-)

[yuki]

thank you im glad you liked it :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Jake Donald Stephens]

Very nice!
:-) × billion.

[yuki]

thank you!

[Jake Donald Stephens]

You're welcome!!