need/want

after the storm

the sunshine

in my eyes

was too much 

the dampness 

remained

on my jacket

I felt it odd indeed

to suffer such

consequence

for no prior 

insolence

but the gods were determined

to take my harvest

Reviews

[sienikeha]

: )

[Bruce]

ahhh yes you are right I missed too! thank you
sienikeha

[sienikeha]

i like this -->
the gods were determined
to take my harvest

fdbk: ..was to(o) much

[Bruce]

thank you mal and emily burns for the review. I imagined myself as a farmer in juxtaposition to what I truly am.

[_mal]

Really lovely style, loved that first bit

[Emily B]

this is a nice surprise on a day like today

i like your style, that last clump of words was like a lightning bolt on a clear day