House that is No Home

House is not a Home

This house is no home,
      this building with no love.
This group of people are not family,
      missed all love,care,and trust.

I wanted this once,
      and now I regret.
I should've chosen what I need.
I should've been contented with it.

This house I'm now living with
      seemed a hell in Earth's crust.
The house I'm seeking now
      was a paradise in disguise.

In here, I'm sick.
      Nobody knows.
In here, I'm dying.
      Nobody cares.

This is what I wanted once,
      I deserve this.
A severe punishment,
      and a dark way with no return.

The home I'm seeking,
      would stay in my heart.
Even if I'm in this house
      of terrible darkness and painful memories.

Despite the madness I suffered,
      two hands of mine remained up.
Tightly holding on with my loving mother
      to our really caring God.


-bryandc15

Author's Note

I'm glad you read this piece. I'm not really aware and confident on what types of review this poem will receive. But since you have this poem read, then I'd like to thank you.

God Bless.

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

speaks ,pulls at the rips I walk with,the boot in the nuts , a breath lost, that I feel will get worse, before it can get better ,better is so far gone,the feeling is a ghost,Mother Mary send a Holy spirit ,a angel of sun to light up a home ,a corner for -bryndc15

RR "Hyena"

[bryandc15]

Aww.. Thank you:)

[PaperLife]

Your quiet, untouched, but abused box of emotions streams its already scattered pieces of sadness into the wind. Like ageless places faltering at every step you've chosen to write here. Where everything lays silent in the end. Your words take on deeply rooted emotions that ache but are strong. The darkness and light blatantly scream for help, but in the most subtle way. I love your mind. Like you have this intellectual deep twinge in it and yet provide comfort for your own ailing soul. Sad, dark, but poetic. Well done.

[bryandc15]

Thank you.

[PaperLife]

You're a talented write, Always.

[bryandc15]

Thank you again.

[Somebrownnerd]

Great write! Very despondent feeling to it, but that seems to be the tone. The only part that tripped me up was:

"This group of individuals are not family"- perhaps "people' instead of "individuals"?

I don't know its your work, I like how it is, I really enjoyed reading it. Looking forward to more of your work.

-SBM

[bryandc15]

Thank you. Perhaps I should consider your suggestion.

[StephL]

Beautiful

[bryandc15]

Thank you:)

[KAOlmsted]

Be careful what you wish for. Thank you for sharing this with us.

[bryandc15]

My pleasure.

[Jan]

Amazing... really powerful words... great job!

[bryandc15]

Thank you!

[Rhianne Ney]

All the lines are powerful and stands by itself it was a fun read. So I placed it in my library. >O<
100/100, dude

[bryandc15]

Thank you:)

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome~!

[Jess]

keep it up bry:')nicely done......

[bryandc15]

Thank you:)

[mhaie]

so emotional. Nice transition

[mhaie]

so emotional. Nice transition