evertime

another poemmm but there my favorite things to write.

 

Everytime.

 

Everytime you whisper

my heart bounds two times faster.

 

 

everytime my body warms

i go backk to..

 

everytime you whisper.

 

sleething like a snake

more -n- more

i begin to feel uncomfortable.

 

everytime you whisper.

 

i smell the scent and feel the roughness

everytime you whisper.

 

-corbin

Author's Note

i dont think its my best writing
ingore spelling but tell me what you feel when you read this and any lines that may make it better.

Reviews

[Fallen Angel]

I feel the truth behind the message. I think that this could apply to so many things other then boyz in your life.

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

well, well, well corbin! We here have yet another great heart-filled poem. As I read this I could the soft touches and whispers, but soothing and sending chills up my spine. This is a great example of how the simplest touches and words can effect us or bring us to tears. This connection you have with this person seems very strong, or was very strong. Love so sweet seems almost sinful, but it does seems pleasant to be loved. :)

well I am glad that you have continued to write!

best of wishes!
peace
~may

[That Weirdo You Just Mi..]

I really like this one girly. Although the one you made up at lunch with Jenni was funny. You should post it on here lol. Keep up the good work! Luvs you! LeeLee

[Marina]

I love this.
I absolutley adore it.

This is really good.
The idea and the poem itself.

Great job. Awsome write.

XxStaySweet,
Rina