Open Arms

Lift the veil so we can breathe

Let us see the shining sun

Open up your rusty gates

Give us shelter in your warmth

 

Pull us out of the heavy sand

And let us bathe in your cool springs

Lift the weight that bears us down

Give us space to spread our wings

 

Don’t leave us hiding in the dark
Where we choke and fade to dust

Lift us out of the gloomy swamp

And let us melt in your embrace

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This was an inspiration. I loved the line:

*Open up your rusty gates*

It's like the world has forgotten that they have someone they can lean on. This had me think of how sad this world would be if our pillar of support collapsed under our weight. This poem truly made me grateful to be able to as for help and protection under the love that is held for us all. Beautiful work. There is a gentle confidence in it all..that every cry for help will be responded to.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. We need to be able to see. To know freedom and be able to hold on to dreams and hope. I like your ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Mike Espinosa]

This is a great poem. Your word choice was very well used.

I only have one problem. "Where we choke fade to dust" needs punctuation of some sort. The way it is right now confused me and made me stumble a little bit.

Other than that this poem is great. Good job.

[James Watts]

This was beautifully written and well expressed. You have a passion in your writing that many lack and that is why I enjoy it so much.

[HorrorMaster]

Awesome poem

[Norma M Sutton]

This is beautiful. I love the last two lines of each stanza.

[♥(heatherawesome..]

i love it awesome

[aftervision]

this could be anywhere -- this took me back down the road to a place in my past that made me who i am but would love to forget

[Tina Kline]

I agree, this is an inspiration, asking for God to lift us up out of the mess that we are into his Holy Embrace.

[Ruth]

This is poetically shimmering:)
Nice use of emotion and hope!
A beautiful piece!
xx