Woman

 

Looking at you I thought

to myself

there is a mesmerizing magic aura about you. 

I am captivated

by the delving intensity

in your hypnotizing eyes.

It’s sweet!

It’s so sweet! 

The symmetry of your features,

the natural flow of your beauty

defies description.

It’s new.

Oh! So new.

God’s upgraded creation.  

The soothing vibe in your voice

lulls me

cajoles me 

Your lips conjure more sanguinity

than a speck of land in a blue desert. 

In this chaos,

you seem to be a centre of gravity

giving balance and bearing to humanity. 

It is hard these days to come across a woman.

that summons unwavering beauty and altruism.

I wanted to talk to you longer,

get to know you better.

But all that came out was

“sorry”

as I bumped into you

while you’re talking on the phone.

Will I ever see you again?

Reviews

[Anne Martin]

I love, love, love this!

God's upgraded creation.

Yes!

Seriously, these are my favourite lines:

In this chaos,
you seem to be a centre of gravity
giving balance and bearing to humanity.

The bittersweet ending was the only one that it could have had. Supreme!

[Emily B]

I love this . . . such beautiful words for a woman who remains a mystery . . . wonderfully written

[Angel's Lady]

Oh, snap! LMAO! Too cute. Love it!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Beautiful praise of woman, your write reflects, longing and mystery. Good write.

[Li Li]

This reminds me of things I have recently studied..... the female divinity. The grace of a woman is natural and begins the creation of so much. Not even in just humanity, but all forms of life.

This had a very calm feel to it... a longing sense. You captured a moment that seemed to be moving so slow... then at the end, it's as if the reality came back and time was once again on track.

It is hard these days to come across a woman.
that summons unwavering beauty and altruism.

Society has such control... woman does seem to forget their worth. Then eventually, you come across that woman that still has elegance.

Such an emotion.... Such light.

Bless.

[PianoandPage]

a man starved by a world that makes no sense. i feel like i got more a sense of the writer than the woman. which is really amazing writing really. what he notices. his likes and desires.

"lulls me
cajoles me" - nice consonance there. love that kind of poetry when spoken aloud. gives it a nice beat.

the end was a nice touch.... bumping up against her. the frustrating brevity of contact.

my only suggestion would be to cut out the last line. for me it weakened the impact of the end of the piece.

[Rambling Prose]

Upon reading through this the first time, I was thrown off by: "The symmetry of your features," - I automatically locked my mind's eye on an animal of some sort. This comes natural to me as I am a double entendre junkie. I love creating an illusion just to leave the reader shaking their head at the finish line. (giggles)

Reading further along though, this image quickly vanished and I refocused. It's funny how when taken aback by something or someone - we freeze in motion and along with all those warm, fuzzy feelings, goes another missed opportunity.

~a thought provoking write~

[MichelleSun]

That was a beautiful expression of your sentiment...I wish someone would write something like that for me... I hope you find her again... If it was meant to be you will....

[closed account]

awwwe, I loved this poem.. I hope you see her again... this was beautiful!! thanks for sharing..