When I Dream Of You

 

I keep your voice loitering

in my mind like I keep chocolate

leisurely melting in my mouth. 

I hung on to you the way

a summer’s day holds on to sunlight

until the sun

coyly withdraws behind the horizon

in a fiery, orange shroud.

That’s why the sun, which seems

trounced by the darkness of night,
brazenly surges back into the morning,

the day's waiting embrace.

When I close my eyes, I could feel

the warmth of your body

by my side;

your head gently reposes

on my shoulder; your arms wrapped around

my chest

and your fingers

touching my face. In my dreams,

you gracefully float like a water Lily

sailing down the dawdling stream

of my consciousness.

Your brows accentuate your eyes like two
crescents in a starless sky.

You are magnificent. 

Reviews

[MagiCrystal]

aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

[Emily B]

this is wonderful, a great way to start my day

[LJW]

Very hot in a cool kind of way.

Again, your last line is stunning.

[Damien Dsoul]

It is revolvinly satisfying, a very moving piece you have here.

[april_moonflower]

I really like this poem alot. very nice. calming yet full of emotion and love!

[Li Li]

Such a calming piece. Really made me sit back and stare at the screen for a moment afterwards just to take it all in. If this were music, I think it would be classical. The tone that you used in this is so subtle.

You always know the right metaphors to use to describe your emotions. This really gives the reader an insight on what you have seen. When I got to:

In my dreams, you gracefully float like a water Lily sailing down the dawdling stream of my consciousness.

I immediately thought this was heavenly. I can hear it, see it, and believe in it. This was beauty.

Your brows accentuate your eyes like two
crescents in a starless sky.

Speechless........

Love!