Long Story Short.

"My smiles are an open wound without you." -Fob

 

Your smile is my air,

your voice is my breath.

 

Sometimes I try to convince myself its not worth the heartbreak when I see your perfect smile,

sometimes it works,

until I see you smile.

 

I love everything about you,

from your eyes and your face,

to the way you make my heart beat out of my chest,

 

from the unexplainable happiness in the air when you walk in the room,

to how I can't get your face out of my mind. . . even in unconsciousness.

 

I love your voice,

I love your eyes,

I love how you seem so oblivious to the the fact that I'm walking in hearts around you,

I love your heartbeat,my lullaby,

I love your imperfections.

 

Long story short,

I love you.

Author's Note

Yeah, i know. It's sappy and cliche.
Do you like? Constructive critism,please.
<3

Reviews

[J.Black]

"Long story short,
I love you."

That's all you actually needed to say. It says everything else you just said, without even saying it!

[Wunderlich]

Another nicely written poem. Good job :D

[Somebody you've already..]

This is a wonderful poem, and very origanal. I loved it. Great write

[MaRy]

Wow

This made me cry

is so cute and well written

just be carefull of repeating words

"Sometimes I try to convince myself its not worth the heartbreak when I see your perfect smile,

sometimes it works,

until I see you smile."

IDK,

overall, very nice

[Jade (insanity)]

I like it. Its very well written...its catchy...keep writing, its awsome...

By the way I love the book series Twilight..

[A sea person]

Sappy, yes, but isn't that love anyway? And cliche? I don't know about that. How many times do you hear the phrase "walking in hearts?" Actually, I think it's an awesome poem.

The way the poem sounds, it's almost like unrequited love. I might be reading too much into it, but that's how it comes across to me.

Very nicely constructed! Keep it up!

v.r.
Ryan

[Last Lying Look]

Awww, This was adorable!!!!
Loved it, great work, Keep writing!!!

[lauren emily]

Very nice! Keep up the good work, you'll go far!

~Lauren

[HeavensAngel]

Yes! I love it, its beautiful. just perfect.

Angel Love

[DiamondNRough AKA Patty..]

I like it... real original.