Cell Games

My form fit in
between the swollen roof drops.
Tops aside
I kept my stride.

Dissolved in my sin
they're akin (to me).
Muscle through skin cells
wet dry tear wells.

Hydro-captive girl.
I'm a whisper.

Reviews

[A.T.B.]

Good write. Try to do without much rhyming; it takes away from your poetry.

[E York]

Wow...I'm really in awe. Your use of surrealism to express your emotions was incredibly powerful. I don't think that I've ever read anything quite like this before. I read your profile too, so I think it helped convey the message even more poetry. Someone once told me that the best poetry is written in twenty lines or less, and it's pieces like yours that make me agree with that. You have a beautiful command of language and how to create images in your readers' minds. Keep this up! It's very powerful!

[Rockebah]

Good writing: expressing your emotions through your words.

[mysticgmekeepr]

....and your whisper is a scream.

[M. Amphet Salt]

Ha ha ha, this is kinda funny. It gave me a good laugh. I like it.