Dry Eyes

The droplet that ran over your shoulder

And down your spine

Left a silver train behind,

The slug of water.

 

It wasn’t raining -

Was it a tear

Tearing across your skin?

Some symbol of sorrow

Sorrowfully symbolising some

Strange strain on the senses?

 

Yet I saw no sadness in these eyes,

Nor a gleeful twinkle,

Nor any emotion at all,

Simply a droplet

Sliding down your back.

Reviews

[Dinesh Sairam]

Ah, very good. The feeling of not knowing is very poetic by itself. You have pretty much captured it. Well done. Keep writing.

[Michael X]

this is very good, and the word play is fun to read,
it really brought the imagery to life, you've done an awsome job here
so emotionally driven :)

[Justin Street]

Very beautiful description of usually a physical emotional response. "Sorrowfully symbolizing some, Strange strain on the senses?" Great way to go about a witty summary. Good write =) -Justin

[Amy Bumpas]

I love the complexity here, and the word symbolism you
used. Your words are so visual, descriptive. Keep up
the good work:)