Flashes

Flashes fill my mind.

 

Darkness

Beating hearts

Softly spoken words

Gentle lips finally meeting

Aching arms subdued

Passions rising

Light.

Author's Note

I almost accidentally created this semi-antonymic diamante. It truly just came out this way, and worked beautifully-- at least, in my opinion. Anxious to hear your thought.

Do you think the first line, which is separate from the rest of the poem is completely extraneous? I feel like it almost grounds the piece, but I am not married to it. Let me hear your opinions.

****On further analysis, this is not a TRUE diamante, because, of course, those poems usually include primarily adjectives or "-ing" verbs. Therefore, to all you purists, this is not a diamante, and this is my official disclaimer. However, I feel like the IDEA of that form is certainly present here.****

Reviews

[Kes]

I think it's very good. I could certainly feel my cheeks getting red as I read it!
It's great, I love it. :)