His Eyes

the freshness of love :)

I haven't looked in his eyes

I have no idea what color they are

I haven't looked in his eyes

I fear the trouble it'd cause

for if I swoon over his simple touch

and hang desperately onto his every word

if I look into his eyes I'd be a goner for sure

thus I still haven't looked in his eyes 

Reviews

[GunMetal]

I wrote a poem just like this years ago, "I still don't know the color of her eyes" it was a metaphor; I adored her, but I didn't truly know her. From this though I get the impression that your holding back your feelings for fear of the newness of it all. You don't want to get too lost, too soon.

[SarahCortland]

This is very good. I like it. It reminds me of when i was too afraid to tell someone I like them. Though this almost seems slightly deeper! :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

I know what you mean, it them eyes that that get you hypnotized
Great job well done.

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

Hmmm I like this short ans sweet and to the point...I did find a minor mistake in the 6th line, "and hang desperately hang onto his every word," I think you meant to take out a "Hang." But other than that I enjoyed the read...



Well From One Word-Play Poet To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!!!

[Marilu Elizabeth]

i luv this good job keep writing...it was great

[Manda]

aww this was pretty good! well done!