In Spirit

We are in time a mote of dust,

a pin prick in an ocean sky.

While some may catch the comet's flare,

each one of us is doomed to die.

What causes some to burn so bright

when most live out their lives in night?

I'd like to dance above the clouds,

do cartwheels over mountains high.

Chase rainbows to the valley's end

and grow two wings so I might fly.

These things I may not do on earth,

but will in spirit with re-birth.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Beautifully captured thought Chris, which leads me to wonder if we remove religion and personal beliefs from the equation for a moment, leads to the wonder that seems so primal and ingrained into our dna, of why we all have the feeling of being finally free of bodily form so intense, that it leads to another thought of this "life" being an audition for whatever it is I feel and you felt strongly enough t pen these words.
The thought does seem to lead us somewhere beyond faith and into realms unspoken, felt and known.
I wonder why we wonder such wonders, beneath a starless night sky where even the atmosphere of our own planet can cover these night jewels, how we still sense them there, waiting for us to unchain ourselves from our gravity obeying shells and see and be them without the need for eyes.
Now if you'll excuse me, I'll go back to counting twinkles before that big twinkle returns (the sun) ☀️😊☀️

[Chris Shaw]

Thoughts beyond faith, sort of grab me. I am not keen on organised religion Lorry. Thanks for your thoughtful review on an older poem, out for an airing. Your avatar is incredibly stunning. Tell me more about it please.

Chris

[Lorry]

Was taken 22th May 2016 and just came across it again. I think it was taken at Loch Lomond but from what side I knoweth not. I was thinking it will be my first jaunt out when the chaos of lock down easing settles down, around 2023 😊
Officially it is out of bounds but only because the many idjits who have headed there now the sun is out have made it a danger to life with people parking on the only road. Selfish ***** 😊
Its the second time it's happened that police towed all vehicles away yesterday again and locals cabs refused to take them the 70 odd miles to to the pound and closed all B&B's. The sane are rebelling and about flippin time 😊

[Chris Shaw]

The image is spectacular. You know there are nutters everywhere. Both sides of the border :)

[Lorry]

Yep, it's like an explosion in a snickers factory up here when the sun comes out to play. Nuts everywhere, but at least the squirrels will be happy 😊

[Thomas W Case]

A wistful reach for the extraordinary, grounded in the inevitability of mortality—your longing lifts the poem above its earthly confines.
The second stanza’s airy imagery gives a hopeful counterbalance to the somber opening, a quiet promise of transcendence.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Thomas for sharing your thoughts. Always valued and appreciated. Have a good Wednesday.

Chris

[Michael Sun Bear]

Really nice rhythm and rhyme. I so relate to what you have written. I once did an exhaustive review of all the stories I could find relating the experiences of people who had died but after some time were resuscitated. Between my lifelong interest in various spiritual traditions, participation in Sufism, and those readings, I am absolutely certain of the result you describe.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Michael, I found your thoughtful review really interesting. I love that you can relate to what I have written. So pleased you enjoyed my poem. Thank you so much for stopping by.

Chris

[Curly Grace]

I apologize for the earlier post. I normally catch the misspell. I really connected with this.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased you connected with my words. I do typos all the time.

[Brandon Houser]

This is beautiful Chris. Every line a painting. I truly enjoy this. You are truly a sparrow.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Brandon. It’s an old poem, but one that is truly me and thank you too for the sparrow. I love our avian friends.

Chris

[Neville]

Made me smile no end so ya did .. tis quite lovely our Chris I hope you are rite .. in fact, I'm pretty sure you are .. Neville 💜

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Neville. Who knows what comes next:) It’s all guess work, but I reckon it beats some of the other stuff out there at the moment. Your new book arrived today by the way. 💜

[Neville]

I am thrilled and honoured and grateful and can't thank you enough our Chris honest .. 💜

[Soren]

I could not agree more to what you have so eloquently put in this wonderful piece. This is a fav. Chris one that I will remember through the day. Loved it.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Soren I am delighted that this little poem has become a favourite one for you. I am smiling big time my friend.

[emmajoy]

' What causes some to burn so bright - when most live out their lives in night? ' What a thought.

(Many might use the word 'fright# instead - as per the helpline. ?)

Could say that your latter words are down to wishful thinking but, wonderful poet that you are, Chris. you can imagine, dream - and fly with your poetry, reaching the heights you've always wanted to attain. You have the words, for sure, are more fortunate than many who can only yearn for things they know they will never have. How tragic is that. Such a finely worded poem. Go for it.. will wave you off!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Em for sharing your thoughts. I wrote this little poem quite a while back. I can’t even recall what inspired the lines. However it seems that many can relate to its meaning. The afterlife, I wonder what comes next? No hurry to find out. I have much more to do on this plane:) Hope your Sunday has been a good one.

[emmajoy]

More than happy to catch up on poems I've not read whilst off and away laden 'all sorts to deal with or with which to deal!

Tis said we've all lived many lives but so many of us have poor memories!!! Will leave it at that.
Sundays are thought good even if not, Chris :)

[emmajoygreen]

Your poetry and reviews have always impressed your followers, Chris, and always will. one of our dearest cousins has recently passed. My local brother and I have chosen your above poem as being as appropriate it can be for her. Your words are as near Shan's personality and character as any can be. (In a large family as ours, there is too often a passing. Our past made plan was made years ago: we'll keep flying until we find each and every one of us then have our inevitable and wonderful get-together!

[Chris Shaw]

I’m touched by your review Em. Thank you so much. I am so sorry for your loss. Take care while you grieve.

Chris

[LazerRays]

Even though I am young, I know death is inevitable. As scary as that is, my only way of living is to enjoy each moment to the fullest. We do not know what awaits us after death, but wasting my life wondering will do me nothing. I'd like to think I can dance on clouds right now, and chase rainbows. I want to be one with nature, and the world, as I am a part of it. Every sunny day is refreshing, the rain is a song, and all the most beautiful things come from living and experiencing the world around us. Loved this poem!

[Chris Shaw]

Your review is full of the joy of youth. It is uplifting. I have many more years to my belt than you :) I haven!t perhaps achieved as much as I would have liked too and time passes by quick. Your thoughts are welcome and very much appreciated.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It may be that our spirits find the peace our bodies never can and the longing of the flesh is finally fulfilled by letting go. I do not know but I will hope. I enjoyed the read.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Fabian. I appreciate you stopping by to read an old poem out for a breather.