In Spirit

We are in time a mote of dust,

a pin prick in an ocean sky.

While some may catch the comet's flare,

each one of us is doomed to die.

What causes some to burn so bright

when most live out their lives in night?

I'd like to dance above the clouds,

do cartwheels over mountains high.

Chase rainbows to the valley's end

and grow two wings so I might fly.

These things I may not do on earth,

but will in spirit with re-birth.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Beautifully captured thought Chris, which leads me to wonder if we remove religion and personal beliefs from the equation for a moment, leads to the wonder that seems so primal and ingrained into our dna, of why we all have the feeling of being finally free of bodily form so intense, that it leads to another thought of this "life" being an audition for whatever it is I feel and you felt strongly enough t pen these words.
The thought does seem to lead us somewhere beyond faith and into realms unspoken, felt and known.
I wonder why we wonder such wonders, beneath a starless night sky where even the atmosphere of our own planet can cover these night jewels, how we still sense them there, waiting for us to unchain ourselves from our gravity obeying shells and see and be them without the need for eyes.
Now if you'll excuse me, I'll go back to counting twinkles before that big twinkle returns (the sun) ☀️😊☀️

[Chris Shaw]

Thoughts beyond faith, sort of grab me. I am not keen on organised religion Lorry. Thanks for your thoughtful review on an older poem, out for an airing. Your avatar is incredibly stunning. Tell me more about it please.

Chris

[Lorry]

Was taken 22th May 2016 and just came across it again. I think it was taken at Loch Lomond but from what side I knoweth not. I was thinking it will be my first jaunt out when the chaos of lock down easing settles down, around 2023 😊
Officially it is out of bounds but only because the many idjits who have headed there now the sun is out have made it a danger to life with people parking on the only road. Selfish ***** 😊
Its the second time it's happened that police towed all vehicles away yesterday again and locals cabs refused to take them the 70 odd miles to to the pound and closed all B&B's. The sane are rebelling and about flippin time 😊

[Chris Shaw]

The image is spectacular. You know there are nutters everywhere. Both sides of the border :)

[Lorry]

Yep, it's like an explosion in a snickers factory up here when the sun comes out to play. Nuts everywhere, but at least the squirrels will be happy 😊

[barleygirl]

This is one of the most beautiful statements about living that I’ve ever read. I could’ve been a star, except for being plagued by abusive life experiences. But as your poem so astutely suggests, however it turns out is how it was meant to be! There can be beauty & lightness along any path, as long as we are seeing one’s life with clarity, instead of comparing. It’s only in comparing that people fall short. Your message is an inspiration for those starting out & a reason to ditch regret for those in the autumn of life. I love every word here & Juliespenhere read requested me, by the way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

Margie, I am touched by your words. Such high praise for my little poem. So pleased that you read it and for Juliespenhere to read request you.

Chris

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

The spirit flies free and sees what you allow it to see - set free beyond the mind of mortality- wonderfully written-🌹

[Chris Shaw]

Free spirit that's me, always will be. Thank you

Chris

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Pleasure- it’s the only way for us to be truly free- one with oneness🌹

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

My dream or sentiment exactly this is ver spiritual indeed beautiful well done love it

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much. Pleased someone else dreams as I do.

Chris

[Kelly Scheppers]

I always wanted to fly and dreamed of it many times as a child. Perhaps my spirit will - someday. I love this, Chris. Your ending gave it much momentum for me!

[Chris Shaw]

I too have always wanted to fly. I quite often imagine myself doing it Kelly, even now. Thank youread moreI too have always wanted to fly. I quite often imagine myself doing it Kelly, even now. Thank you

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Wonderfully enjoyed, Chris!
Like yin to YANG, valleys to MOUNTAINS, etc; the two halves of your poem are relative in spirit and moment to the other's existence, and what an infinitely complex question … my-MY!
The level of consciousness that spoke these words is high, indeed, and the premise of reincarnation is a genuinely exciting thought for me to entertain … it actually feels good. : )

Thank you, Dear Poetess, for charming my senses … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you too Richard for your kind review.

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Kind?
Oh, sure thing.

[Chris Shaw]

Well you said I charmed your senses, and I thought it was kind of you to say so (lol)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Your poem is so lovely and inspiring Chris- perfection in words and rhyme. It flies with the angels and flows like a bubbling spring. Insightful, humble, spiritual, faith-filled lines. You brought me happy tears my friend. “These things I may not do on earth, but will in spirit with re-birth.” Brilliant.

[Chris Shaw]

Your words brimming with kindness Annette. So pleased you found some inspiration in my lines. Have a wonderful Sunday.

All good wishes

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i wish i could tell those who feel they live their lives "in night"---
that they are special too...and meant something to more people than they could ever realize..

we all do cartwheels in our own way and time.

i really like this piece so much. I can feel it starting to inspire me to write something along the same vein...and makes me think of emily dickinson's "i am nobody, are you nobody too?"

j.

[Chris Shaw]

Starting to feel proud of this piece and flattered that you believe it could inspire you to write something along those lines too. Thank you Jacob.

[KeeD]

This is a such a beautiful concept. I wish to relive these words a thousand times. In terms of how you delivered the message, you truly are a gifted wordsmith. From the opener, I felt how humble and small we all are in the eventuality of things and how we wish to make an impact, not for some earthly pride or sense of recognition but that soul satisfaction is a term I'm going to use here. Your piece has indeed satisfied my mind and soul. Excellent stuff!

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Keegan, and thank you for calling on my work. Yes, this poem a little bit of spirituality for your mind and soul. Pleased it worked for you. We are indeed insignificant when it comes to time and space.

Chris

[lightsong]

I was thinking that I will tell You in my review what You've said in Your last two lines! the Spirit can do more than what we can imagine, but it's locked inside the body, when it's free let it be after death, or even when we develop a high degree in our spiritual consciousness and awareness, the real power of it will be released, lovely poem my friend with a great meaning, thank You for sharing it.

[Chris Shaw]

Here's to free spirits. Thank you so much for your kind review.

Chris