Chris, I can identify with this one. While I am an only child, I spent most of my childhood with my cousin. When someone you have shared so much with is gone, it seems as though the memories get blurry. The honest emotion in this poem resonated with me. The rhythm and rhyme of your lines makes for a lovely flow. May the memory of your brother always be a blessing to you. Lydi**
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
Thank you Lydi** I appreciate your share here. Your review is encouraging and your thoughts kind. read moreThank you Lydi** I appreciate your share here. Your review is encouraging and your thoughts kind.
It is so beautiful poem with very complex feelings hidden in it, I cannot feel your whole pain but absolutely a part of it, which is hidden in the poem, I don't know if the painful memories will disappear or not but surely the pain will.
Ved
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Dear ved, thank you for leaving such a lovely review. We learn to live with our losses, but fortunat.. read moreDear ved, thank you for leaving such a lovely review. We learn to live with our losses, but fortunately our memories still keep our loved ones who have gone, close to us.
The joys found in balloons. The games that we all played with cries of happy delight.
The only sadness was when they were gone, but still, we remember the fun we had.
Take care - Dave
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Thank you Dave. Losing a balloon at a young age, was probably my first experience of what loss felt .. read moreThank you Dave. Losing a balloon at a young age, was probably my first experience of what loss felt like. Setting me up for the far more painful ones later on in life.
This poem with balloon holding in hand is so visual. It's a heartbreaking tale of two siblings and the common cord that once United them but with time's cruel hand that tie broke.... But the loving spirit still remains and the grief softens as time is the best healer.
You have put the hard reality and the pain a notch above with this fine write...
You so understood this poem Sima. Thank you, thank you thank you. Thank you especially for calling o.. read moreYou so understood this poem Sima. Thank you, thank you thank you. Thank you especially for calling on the anniversary of Steve's passing.
Chris
4 Years Ago
You are so welcome and I am so sorry for your loss! My heart goes to you... ❤
i love the metaphor of holding onto a balloon and having it taken away - so clever and effective. at parades, fairs and such i am always saddened to see balloons sailing away - knowing that a child is unhappy at the loss. a piece of those we've lost stays with us. such a great metaphor because can also represent letting go and us and them being set free from burdens.
'Grief bites hard, yet time can soften.'
indeed. wonderful piece of verse chris ... :)
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Thanks Pete, Yes the lost balloon as a metaphor for our losses in life, has always worked for me. He.. read moreThanks Pete, Yes the lost balloon as a metaphor for our losses in life, has always worked for me. Here one minute, gone the next and watching that balloon float away knowing it will never return, is so powerful as well as heart breaking.
Loss of any kind can be devastating
The balloons lost as a child and the
memories of your brother in both of
your childhood..grief does bite hard
indeed..glad the element of time has
soften the loss somewhat..well penned
piece here dear Chris..
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Many thanks Fran Marie. So appreciate you stopping by to call on this piece on the anniversary of my.. read moreMany thanks Fran Marie. So appreciate you stopping by to call on this piece on the anniversary of my brother's passing. All good wishes.
However hard we try, memories survive, which - in so many ways are precious. But, recalled at the wrong time, they really hurt. No answer except one's own personal coping mechanism, I suppose. Fine words, Chris, as always. Take care, keep safe, please.
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
So right Em. Those memories are precious and yet we have no control over when they resurface. They d.. read moreSo right Em. Those memories are precious and yet we have no control over when they resurface. They do as and when they will. Sometimes that can reduce you to jelly. Really appreciate you stopping by.
Beautifully expressed are these emotions, love the flow and how I can feel the memories flowing ;-] I take my pen and salute you my friend ;-]. Wonderful
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4 Years Ago
Thank you Weeoing willow. Your stopping by today means alot. Pleased you like the tribute to my brot.. read moreThank you Weeoing willow. Your stopping by today means alot. Pleased you like the tribute to my brother.
Yes, time is what we can't avoid in ordr to heal. That feeling of losing a loved one is feels like you're dying yourself. The pain is unbearable.
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4 Years Ago
Thank you Tim. Time softens the grief, the anniversaries have you reliving it. I really appreciate t.. read moreThank you Tim. Time softens the grief, the anniversaries have you reliving it. I really appreciate the visit. Thanks for stopping by.
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..