September Melody

(drifting along on the river)

Remnants of misty autumn lifts

Sun floods our space, a trace of us

Stirs that mirrored glass reflection

Only the purr of an engine

Like a cat, fattened with cream of milk

Top of the morning, flat on her back

Worshipping in warmth

We drift and pass, willows weeping

Sweeping, tips wet, tresses touching

Caressing, a young girl's hair

Softly in September's care 

In company of ochre boats

Confetti floating in a swirl

Of fallen leaves, we make our way

A melody of moments in

A perfect autumnal day

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Very soothing! I could feel the charm exuding from the lines. I only had trouble with the first line - and this may be a British vs Canadian thing - but should "lifts" be "lift" because "remnants" is plural? Just wondering. This is a marvellous poem overall. Well done!

[Chris Shaw]

You are probably right. Every now and again the grammar thing can slip me up. Thanks so much for your visit emipoemi.

Chris

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Davidgeo]

It feels nice to read stuff written like this.

You have a soft velvety touch to how you describe things in writing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks David. A soft, velvety touch is fine by me.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you get me there with your incredibly work on the senses...imagery galore...i felt that cool, crisp breeze of autumn and imagined all the colors...

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Jacob. We have another day like that today. That sunlight on your skin, lazing in the garden though .....

[grimfukle]

It leaves one feeling peaceful and content.
Great job Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased you enjoyed the read. Thanks for checking in.

Chris

[Iam-me]

I could really picture this beautiful Autumn day and the cat getting the cream. Wonderful expressed.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Dawn. We have another day like that described here with us today. Gorgeous.

Chris

[Iam-me]

I admit it is a glorious day here also.

[Chris Shaw]

Happy enjoying it, while it lasts :))

[Iam-me]

I do agree Chris. And like wise you. Have a wonderful day.

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful use of words and thoughts. You made the reader believe every word. I love the way you made the description come alive in vision and in thoughts for the reader. Thank you Chris for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote, pleased my words were able to paint the image for you.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

You painted a amazing picture and you are welcome my friend Chris.