Gold On Grey

when sun illuminates sky’s winter grey
to cast a golden gleam on crystal sea
it raises spirits wrapped in warm dressed clothes
a treasure chest of jewels for all to see

like diamond dust that sparkles cluster bright
said gems a given gift to mesmerize
they can not fail to please it’s nature’s way
a feast for all with tired weary eyes

how lifting is the prize of dazzling light
a chance to watch the dance on salty waves
the rays are like a tonic sent to heal
escape from mindsets troubled darkest caves

how fine these moments are for us to hold
when breakers rolling in are kissed with gold

Reviews

[Soren]

Wow! Chris you have captured such beautiful images in such a mesmerizing meter that like the waves laps at the shore of emotion. It is a most lovely piece that somehow I had missed in the past. I particularly love the ending two lines of this beautiful sonnet. Masterful Cris my congratulations

[Ayesha Faiz]

Your poem is serene and luminous. The imagery—“diamond dust,” “crystal sea,” “kissed with gold” is breathtaking. It beautifully captures nature’s power to heal and uplift. A truly soothing and graceful piece. Excellent job Chris!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Ayesha for your warm and generous words. Have s beautiful weekend.

Chris

[Ayesha Faiz]

I should thank people like you for writing such masterpieces. You too Chris, have a lovely weekend!

[Chris Shaw]

You are too kind. Thank you so much. You have made my day. 🌹

[Ayesha Faiz]

Well if that made your day then It made mine as well. Always keep wearing your beautiful smile Chris! I really mean it by heart.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much 😊

[Lara]

This piece is a sea birds eye full of riches ethereal and fleeting. I admire the discipline it takes to encapsulate it with this form too, Chris! As though you were the jeweller diligently polishing each facet with care, that the moment may solidify for lasting appreciation.
And so it does.
I like this!

[Chris Shaw]

So pleased you enjoyed my efforts here Lara. Thank you for your kind words.

Chris

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful imagery. Sharp and vivid.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Thomas. All best wishes.

Chris

[Nat]

I love the gold and grey elements, how they transition into one another. GOOD JOB!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Nat for stopping by. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Matthew Daalling]

You got it lady! You could tell that you have a love of poetry! It's very evident! Okay I take back that last exclamation mark but you definitely got it!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Matt for your encouragement. Much appreciated.

Chris

[redd Brick Keshner]

In my imagination, the gold of sunset or sunrise mingling in the horizon with whatever colours splash the day brings an altering hue and takes us on a ride through the dat and it’s substance🙏🏻🕊

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Freds. Your thoughts welcome and very much appreciated. Sorry for late response. Have been having a break.

Chris

[redd Brick Keshner]

Good to have you back around the site, Chris 🙏🏻🕊
Freds.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Passing along something I was taught by Rattle editor Tim Green: he says colors are kind of weak words and it is much stronger if we can find a metaphor to express the color.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks for the advice Winston. My metaphors have always been weak. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Dylan Macadham]

Funny, 'Gold on Grey' put in mind of a military uniform before I clicked it.
As always, Chris, I'm inspired by the way you find Mood-brighteners in Nature,
or maybe it's the other way around😊 ...Either way, it's a lovely read :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dylan. How strange for you to think of military uniform when you clicked on my title. Anyway, I am pleased you enjoyed my nature write and that you stopped by to share your thoughts. Have a lovely Friday.

Chris

[Dylan Macadham]

Happy Friday & Weekend to you too Chris :)

[A.H.]

nature creates pristine beauty. it always puts on a show. this is a beautiful ode to colors of ocean, with sun, sparkle, light and waves. these moments when experienced are worth a gold, aptly expressed in the closing lines. thanks for this wonderful write, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Your review is very warmly received AH. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts. So pleased you enjoyed my poem. Have a happy Friday.

Chris

[A.H.]

You're very welcome, Chris! Happy Friday to you too.