Foreboding

today the sun shines brightly
the lake is filled with rain
the sparkle on the surface
is marred by pangs of pain
the river should flow easy
so gentle to the sea
yet all I feel is turbulence
and storm clouds over me

Reviews

[Neville]

This couldn't possibly wear any other title could it .. You just nailed its namesake in general terms and to this particular page .. darn near perfect .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for such encouragement Neville on this brevity. Have a lovely sunny Sunday.

Chris

[Neville]

My absolute pleasure our Chris

Neville

[Lydia Shutter]

Chris, the honest emotion in this write really hit me. I hope nothing is wrong in your world....or at least that you can remedy it. The rhyming is great. Lydi**

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Lydi for your thoughts. I appreciate your words. Have a beautiful week.

read moreThank you dear Lydi for your thoughts. I appreciate your words. Have a beautiful week.

Chris

[Kady R.]

Hiii Chris,

I normally find my refuge in nature. Its wonderful how at times nature moves in the same way we do. For example I'll be sad enough to cry and then it rains, like my tears are being heard.

Hope things go better with you Chris.
-Kady

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for your very kind thoughts Kady. I appreciate you. All the best.

Chris

[Samuel Dickens]

Appropriate words for these times--I feel the same. A perfect poem, I'd say.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Sam. Pleased you enjoyed your visit. Have a good week. All the best.

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Exceptional poeting, Dear Chris, as usual✨

In perfect Ballad meter, via a-b-c-b rhymes, your poetic voice sings wonderfully strong, penetrating to one's very core.

Whether composed from a deeply personal relationship or unfortunate politico-social level, there's no doubt any one of us can relate to the throes (as you've so poignantly expressed) of brightest hope turned to dark dismay.

May destiny, on both sides of the pond, flow e'er gentle to the sea...🙏

I so respect and admire how your mind and heart works, and how astutely you wield your pen to express it.
Thank you sincerely for sharing You … Happy Autumn! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Richard, thank you so much for your very kind and encouraging review. Pleased to be able to access this site again. Good to have a back up plan though just in case. Every good wish winging their way across the pond.

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Every word meant, Chris.

Yes, it's nice to have access to our Café pages one again, after more times inaccessible than I can count on two hands since first joining in January of 2008 as Rascal, when in September of that same year Charlie and Patrick (WC owners), while "improving" the site, irretrievably deleted every poem of every member's … I had over 600. It never was quite right again; so, I eventually joined another site. Then, having never really quit, I checked WC out in 2015, and finding it much improved joined again as Richard and have been here ever since.

Of all the times WC went down or was innecessible, this time has been the worse, and one can only hope and pray it either stays the same or improves.

Meanwhile, StarsRite seems a suitable alternative; yet, experience tells that no internet writing site is permanent.

Only time will tell ⁓ peace to thee, Dear Chris🕊

[Chris Shaw]

The loss of all that poetry a catastrophe. You are right though, no internet poetry writing site is permanent. Two of my earlier ones have gone altogether. Keeping my fingers crossed that WC will be in receipt of a bit more tlc. Good to have a back up plan though just in case. Thank you Richard. Have a lovely day.

[Richard🖌]

"You, too, Chris!"

[Stella Armour]

Intuition is a powerful thing Chris,lets hope the storm path changes direction...

[Chris Shaw]

I have a very poorly younger sister Stella. No change of direction yet. Thank you so much for stopping by. Poetry has been on the back burner.

Chris x

[Stella Armour]

I am so sorry to hear that Chris, you have had more than your fair share to deal with in recent years.
I don't write much now , just the odd thing and usually a bit ethereal, it must be my age lol.

[Chris Shaw]

Good to hear from you Stella. Take good care of yourself. 🌹

[Pete]

ouch. i felt this. grey days are for pausing to reflect. into our lives a little rain must fall but fret not for the sun will come out again.

"It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see." - Thoreau

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Pete, how wise you are. Good to see you here. Will visit soon. All the best.

Chris

[RomaJ]

The contrast between the bright sun, the sparkling lake, and the storm inside beautifully captures inner turmoil. The final lines, with the river’s turbulence, leave a strong impression of struggle and unrest beneath the surface. Beautifully done.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you RomaJ for visiting and sharing your thoughts. Pleased you have come back to WC after years away. Delighted to have you as a poetry friend.

Chris

[Soren]

I must apologize Chris for a lack of posting and responding lately. My server has blocked me from getting on this site until today. hopefully I will be able to catch up if I can continue to get on. This poem is lovely in its darkness, it is indeed like storm clouds in the sky. I can feel the oncoming storm, the lightning of pain and the thunder of the future. Very nicely written

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Soren. I also have been unable to access this site for a while. Fingers crossed. All good wishes.

Chris

[Amanda Renee]

Perfect in lines and sentiment, perfect.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Amanda. I have been unable to access WC for a while. Fingers crossed. All the best.

Chris