Foreboding

today the sun shines brightly
the lake is filled with rain
the sparkle on the surface
is marred by pangs of pain
the river should flow easy
so gentle to the sea
yet all I feel is turbulence
and storm clouds over me

Reviews

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I enjoyed this lyrical piece of poetry. It's magical in the way it moves. I expect no less from a talented poet as yourself, Chris. Excellent work. CLE

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Carlos for your kind words. Hope all is good in your world.

Chris

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I've had why experiences that to me ended up being premonitions.

[Chris Shaw]

I have the occasional premonition too. That can be scary at times. Thank you Cowboy.

Chris

[LisaCarol]

Incredible writing describing a feeling and premonition that we all feel from time to time. This was very timely for me, as fate would have it. I hope you are ok if you are dealing with a challenge in your life right now. I’m shelving this one in my library. Thank you for sharing your writing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you LisaCarol for your thoughtful review and kind words, especially for including my poem in with your favorites. I am delighted. Have a great day.

Chris

[MarthaKlokke]

This could be me, in morning especially. I feel it as it's written.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for relating Martha and for your visit. All the best to you.

Chris

[John the Baptist]

No matter how pleasant the weather might be, it is inevitably overshadowed by inner storms. This well rhymed piece does not name the particular inner storm, but it is shadowing everything else.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John. Politics can certainly cause a few shadows. We have topsy turvey over here at the moment. It doesn’t smell of roses, I can assure you.

Chris

[John the Baptist]

Look on the bright side, Chris: You don't have to deal with Trump.

[Betty Hermelee]

vivid images, though melancholic, dear Chris; Sometimes even when the rain pours down to make the lake glisten and the sun smiles, we feel inner pain...no matter what the weather.... it does not control us; Pain comes and goes despite all.... lovely painting!!!
Warmly B

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Betty, always a pleasure to have a visit from you and to read your warm words. Have a beautiful day.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

You as well!!!

[Relic]

I've heard about the turbulence you might be speaking about. Parts of the UK are unrecognizable. Too many people moving in from different cultures and changing the face of England. I hope it gets better somehow and the smooth waters come back.

[Chris Shaw]

What you’ve read and heard about our current situation is probably as near to the truth you’ll get. Our freedoms are being eroded with every passing day and if it moves and was born here, it will be taxed to squeaking point. Thank you Tim.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Wonderful metaphor here, Chris.
I really like it when you combine your metaphors with your vivid imagery.
I think there is much turbulence coming...the state of world affairs is such a dark cloud moving in.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear j for your kind words. I think many of us are in for a rough ride in the current political climate. Batten down the hatches and ride out the storm. Have a beautiful day my friend.

Chris

[red93]

Strange what the '6th Sense' tells us at times, particularly at this time of year, when Autumn is just around the corner. Maybe it is the memories of the 2 World Wars being declared in August 1914 and September 1939. Exceptional ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tony. I don’t always enjoy my sixth sense. It has a habit of coming true. Have a glorious day.

Chris

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Here's to the sunshine returning to your life and heart soon, my friend. I dislike a dreary foreboding day but I like your poem.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Fabian. I dislike feelings of foreboding because they have a habit if coming true. Fortunately cloud does eventually shift. All the best to you and yours.

Chris