There Fell I

Emo - I know, but that’s what the muse gave me today

once upon a one off time
the locket round my too soft heart ❤️
in a deadly dark night storm
struck by lightning
fell apart
defenses down exposed to pain
opened up to pouring rain
without protection there fell I
beneath an unforgiving sky
oh the damage diced and spliced
carved and mangled leave it be
the love I felt for someone else
became a wretched curse to me

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow this write is deep I could be wrong but it wasn't The locket but the heart we place faith in the sky above be it God or whatever you believe yes sometimes the wrath of nature can be unforgiving not even prayer can bring back the one we love, so we curse.
Thank you for sharing

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Mauricio for your thoughts. I appreciate your visit. Have a lovely day.

Chris

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you for sharing

[Mauricio Montoya]

Excellent write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I suspect where this came from (inspiration)---
hurts my heart what is happening.
You do have such a soft heart.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you j. Yes inspired by other writes, which my muse picked up on. Soft hearts hurt easy and they also have long memories. You have a soft heart yourself my friend, hate to think of your heart hurting by anything.

Chris

[John the Baptist]

The big hurts can stay with us for years if we let them. No specifics here, but it is apparent the speaker opened up completely to another, who proved unworthy of trust. It is an ordeal many pass through, but it doesn't have to destroy us unless we let it.

[Chris Shaw]

It’s all in the past but this poem was an inspired write and my emo muse just can’t help herself, piling on the agony and the rhyme. Thank you John.

Chris

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Unrequited love and that moment you're forced to realize it will only ever be... unrequited love. A lesson that shapes or breaks. Great write.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Travis for stopping by and leaving some well tested wisdom. I appreciate your visit. My muse went overboard with this one:)

Chris

[Soren]

Loved this one Chris full of metaphor and allegory it speaks to the reader of love and pain that accompanies it at times when it falls. A lovely write with many soft nuances.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Soren for sharing your thoughts. Pleased you found value in my words. Have a lovely day.

Chris

[Soren]

You are most welcome Chris and you have a wonderful day as well