War whoops, loud and close Heart pounding, muscles tight Breathing slowly, with control Eyes flickering sideways, keeping him in focus-- Sudden movements, a flash of blood, Staring down into a dead man's eyes Knowing he watches as I ride. They all do.
The night was long and dark, Echoing with sounds And movement and life-- Wolves following the scent of prey, The panther on the prowl, Young possums nosing in the grass And the hawk silently waiting, Eyes glittering in the moonlight.
The old warrior roused himself, Without a sound gathering his blanket Around the stones and arrows. A moment later, no sign remained That he had ever existed.
The dreams. They came every night now, Not haunting, yet not calm; A mixture of the excitement of battle And the resignation of death As the end of all things.
The old warrior had passed on Every lesson he had ever learned On the fields of both battle and beast. He rested in the confidence That his sons were well prepared For life without him.
The long, patient knowledge That he would go, he must go, Had never brought him a moment's hesitation In all the days and years leading up to this moment. And, in the end, still it was not he But she, who broke, allowing The tears to fall-- She who was from a people Both proud and strong.
He would die a warrior's death, Winning the final battle, Yet losing his life doing so; And thus both the defeated And the victor be.
The night was long, and dark When a warrior rose, and fell Passing from flesh and blood Into images long remembered, Shared among his people As stories told on firelit nights, The memory of his bravery And quiet strength revered By a people both proud and strong.
You have managed to capture the feel of the Native American
people of this land of ours. This is a soulful write.the depth in which they lived in the world is far different than our own, and you have managed to tap into that. Very nicely done!
Aya egi ayohuhisdi. Aya agoti ayohuhisdi. Aya ayano duhasata.
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Damn....where did I leave that Enigma Code Machine???? I bet the folks at SETI know, but they're alw.. read moreDamn....where did I leave that Enigma Code Machine???? I bet the folks at SETI know, but they're always so "out there".......
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OK, you inspired it with this piece. BTW, it's the first review I've ever tried to write in Cherokee.. read moreOK, you inspired it with this piece. BTW, it's the first review I've ever tried to write in Cherokee! O_O I'll let you figure out how to translate it.. it'll be good exercise for my upcoming response to your Writer's Challenge! ;-)
Cherokee! How on earth would I know that? I actually did try to translate it out of Iroquois, howeve.. read moreCherokee! How on earth would I know that? I actually did try to translate it out of Iroquois, however, since the poem is called "Iroquois Warrior"!! Ahem, I am 1/8 Iroquois, by the way, along with Irish, Italian, French Canadian Gypsy (yeah baby!), so lemme ask: are you really Cherokee? Or just Cherry and Free?
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I'm too far diluted to have any reasonable claim but great-grandmother (or maybe great-great, I'd ha.. read moreI'm too far diluted to have any reasonable claim but great-grandmother (or maybe great-great, I'd have to check) was full-blood Cherokee; per the family records.
A lonely soul, or a soul alone?
An unknown great, or a great unknown?
Do my words reveal, display, shout, or shield?
With what motive do I this predilection wield?
And what results will it all yie.. more..