Sweet Release

 

Circumstances

 

Weighing me

 

    D

 

      O

 

        W

 

           N

 

Heaviness

 

All around

 

 

Crying for

 

Release

 

Begging for

 

Retreat

 

 

I’ve carried this

 

Far too long

 

My strength being sapped

 

No longer strong

 

 

“Lay it down

 

  Lay it down”

 

  I hear from within

 

  Quietly and silently

 

  As the dropping of a pin

 

 

I release it gently

 

To His feet

 

At last I bask

 

In joy and in peace

 

Sweet release…

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

Beautifully written, my dear and heard loud and clear. the simplest truths. This is wonderfully refreshing this morning and it lets me know that you are okay which makes me glad today.

You do this structure justice. :=) .... just sayin' .....
Love ya!

[Kelly D. Burris]

Wow! Great piece. I really related to it. Enjoyed it also!
Kelly

[* Mourning Starr *]

Heyyyyyy Carole, you really stepped out of the box on this one, very nicely done...I really enjoyed the read.....

[Roberta Weth]

Wow this piece is amazing I loved the way you used the text to catch our eyes in the first stanza. You really do convey the feeling of elation at letting go.
This is a truly lovely piece and I enjoyed reading it.
~Bobbi

[You Don't Know Me]

James passed this onto me.

I loved how this started out as a cry for help and then became something positive. This was beautifully written. :)

[Ivory]

Very beautiful and sincere.
Wonderful write : )

[Jakuper]

"Circumstances
Weighing me
D
O
W
N
Heaviness
All around "

.......You had me from the first line. Very good.....

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, this is so very beautiful! I really loved reading it. Keep up those wonderful writes.

[Dezaraye]

Wow, this is a really amazing poem. The style and flow are really well done. It touched me. I'm glad I came across your page.

[Greg the Bard]

I like the style and the flow. Nothing seems out of place and the image is profound. "At last I bask - In joy and in peace - Sweet release� sums up the weigh lifted off your shoulders. Good write Mac

[Vicki Phipps]

This is my favorite of all your wonderful work! It's a feeling that we all experience, but you have described it with such grace.
hear from within
Quietly and silently
As the dropping of a pin

That gave me chills! Very touching dear friend! I love it!