to remain secret

 

such beauty i never knew existed
not many words can say all thats said
its to sum up what i feel for someone
my secret admirer i can not allow to know

but it sums up my heart that i can not say
that he never know cause i know of his loves
his loves are many, more than i can bear
but if i may be one of his many to be loved

Reviews

[Anarda Nashai]

Well...I'm not too fond of love poetry...but this one is truly extraordinary. A great account of your feelings and point of view. There's lots of longing here (of course, because you are a secret admirer of someone). I'm sure you would have been able to engage Shakespeare in a very lengthy conversation. GREAT WRITE!

-Anarda Nashai
author of Despondent
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it's a lovely love poem, but there are a few grammatical things you may want to fix up ^^
like
that he never know cause i know of his loves

that he'll never know cause i know of his loves

just little things ^^
-nice write-
-ST

[M. Amphet Salt]

Beautiful as the author.

I like the internal feeling showed here. You show this feeling for another that you can not confide in them, but only on this mere screen for the world to see. I also enjoy the last to lines of the poem....

eX Soldier...

[San Herman Lopez a.k.a...]

Extraordinary is an understatement...

(but it sums up my heart that i can not say
that he never know cause i know of his loves
his loves are many, more than i can bear
but if i may be one of his many to be loved)

You truly are a natural writer.