Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

Just some thoughts

God, can you hear me?

It’s Aaron… I need your help.

Please rescue my soul.

 

Author's Note

Please review... appreciate it :)

Reviews

[Pixieblue]

I hear this, when i close my eyes and listen i can hear a small and scared and feeble voice, tattered and worn just pleading, almost begging for some mercy.
It makes your heart sink.
It also reminds me of a child, unaware and untainted having their first lesson in life but that somehow is a darker picture than the first.

[AaronFreitas]

I mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and getting a whooping. Thanks for your review Pixieblue :)

[Tania]

Simple words, and a truly meaningful poem . Leaves everyone wondering a bit ....

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks my friend :) I am glad it leaves everyone wondering a bit :)

[J.A. Marquez]

Straightforward, to the point. Flawless. I used to pray this same thing all the time.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks J.A. appreciate your review :)

[@juliza]

Great poem! Love the length and simplicity of it. Those few words leave it open for the imagination. Great write!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Juliza :) Appreciate the review my friend

[W R Stowe]

Very good Aaron they go well together

Bill

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Bill :)

[W R Stowe]

your welcome

[Mara]

So simple but so powerful.. amazing
Great job:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Tee :) Appreciate your review

[nazia]

a perfect Senryu .. Such simple words and a powerful impact.. I believe that God will listen to you and rescue your soul :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Nazia! I appreciate your review :)

[yvo miki]

all u have do is pray and he will answer

[AaronFreitas]

Yes maam :) Thank you!

[yvo miki]

Ur welcome

[Jeyanthi]

Plea,inside prayer and faith...
Beautiful expression! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Jeyanthi :) Appreciate your kind words my friend :)

[Jeyanthi]

You are most welcome, Sir ... :)

[mattavelli]

I like the haikus. They are like little puzzle to write. Keep them coming.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy... appreciate your kind words!