Without you

Watching one of my fav shows... wrote some stuff for fun

This is probably a little past due,

but as I keep waiting for time

to heal these wounds… I only find

myself still missing you.

 

I know I was so far from perfect,

No matter how hard I tried…

I could never find happiness... yet it

kills when I see tears in your eyes.

 

I never wanted to hurt you,

Only a chance to love you.

But the harder I tried the 

farther away I pushed you.

 

Maybe I was never good enough.

 

So I found ways to cope and to

be happy momentarily… never

realizing the path of destruction

and heartbreak I would leave behind.

 

Maybe the world will be a better

place without me… I’ll never know.

What I do know is that I’ll never

be a better “me” without you.

Reviews

[modtoddinc]

Poignant piece. The pain and loss of relationship; something every human being experiences. Here you have captured its essence. The pleasure and pain, the truth and blame, elegantly written and evenly delivered. A wonderful poem from an excellent poet. Thank you for rr, and sharing your art.

Peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Todd... sorry for the late response haven't been on much buddy.

[FaeryQueen]

this is so sweet!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Khatoon :)

[Ely]

I know I was so far from perfect,
No matter how hard I tried…
I could never find happiness... yet it
kills when I see tears in your eyes.

If I have understood it correctly, the speaker was unsatisfied with their relationship, was he?

[AaronFreitas]

Yes he was... disappointed... couldn't find that happiness or at least good balance that keeps a relationship in tact. Appreciate your review Ely :)

[Ely]

Oh. Found it!

I never wanted to hurt you,
Only a chance to love you.
But the harder I tried the
farther away I pushed you.

No worries! You've got the most captivating poems here. You may have used the simplest words, but it was really heartfelt. Though I must say I was actually having second thoughts on the speaker's thoughts, perhaps because he's a guy.

[~]

There is no "me" in us, but there is a "u" :)
keep it up my friend! :D

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

This one shot through the heart of me, Aaron...especially the last two lines. Why is it we always blame ourselves when it doesn't work out?

Be kind to yourself...you deserve that, and so much more!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for your kind words Kelly :) I will try to be kind to myself... no promises :) Thanks for your feedback.

[JodieAnne]

Such a lovely worded poem, can really tell you mean every word you wrote, so much honesty. Really liked it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :) Actually when I started writing I had no idea what I was going to write about and it just kind of came out... guess that's why it's so honest but if you read more of my work you'll find that honesty in almost all my writes :) Thanks for your review Jodie

[Emily]

I wonder what show you were watching...inspired by it? Great write!

[AaronFreitas]

Haha actually re-watching it :) Californication... I love that show :) I see some of myself in the main character which is kind of not good probably but it's entertaining. Thanks for your review Emily :)

[Emily]

No problem, Aaron. :)

[Ana B.]

hmmm, can we stand the reality of our life....sometimes i cannot answer this question. A very touching and honest write Aaron :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ana :) Sometimes it is difficult to live in the bed we made but what other choice do we have? I guess we could change it huh haha... I miss you my friend it brought a smile to my face just to see your review! It means a lot and it seems some of the people I have grown with on here are going away... so it's awesome to see you and always... a beautiful picture :)

[Ana B.]

Thank you dear. Life is busy,my muse is wandering....you know how these things are.... take care my friend ;)

[binibiningmaya]

Kudos!!

"What I don't know is that I'll never be a better "me" without you..."
That line got me...

[AaronFreitas]

Awww thanks so much :) I appreciate your feedback :)

[binibiningmaya]

You are so much welcome sir! :)

[Weeping willow]

Beautiful write, as love turns ones soul in and out,jumping hoops to try and keep loves flame alive;]

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :) It is definitely a confusing period in my life :)

[Jmsavestheday]

it is both healing and lonely to know that such personal feelings can be felt so universally. the way you write is both human and tangible. no abstract philosophy to muddy the waters or confuse the purpose. solid word for solid emotion

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you... I try to keep it simple yet honest. For me, no need to make it so confusing you don't know what I am trying to say. When the reader is done with my writes they should have a good understanding of exactly what I mean no confusion.... hopefully :) Thanks for your review :)