FOR YOU LIKE THE SUN

I want to be for you like the sun on winter’s snow... melting you... transforming you into raging rivers... torrents of spring’s song... a wild fury of crystalline light in trembling, tumbling energy... awakened and unleashed to wonder's land... for you are anything but commonplace... a liquid lit desire only sleeping... when I see the world illumined in your eyes... I burn as the fires of a thousand daybreaks... shattering the powerless fragrance of night within... gaze at me now... let me become for you like the sun... 

Reviews

[krystle]

"A wild fury of crystalline light in trembling, tumbling energy" "I burn as the fires of a thousand daybreaks" this is incredible I enjoyed it very much.

[An owl on the moon]

I so appreciate you, krystle! Take care in this new week. :)

[Dhaye]

So romantic...

"I burn as the fires of a thousand daybreaks...
shattering the powerless fragrance of night within...
gaze at me now... let me become for you like the sun..."

Just love this piece. Excellent!

[An owl on the moon]

Dhaye, I deeply appreciate you stopping to read my poetry. Have a beautiful new week! :)

[emmajoy]

' I burn as the fire of a thousand daybreaks..'

When it comes to true love and desire, you write beautifully, dear friend of yore. Just realised that this reminds me ancient writings, or more recently, Neruda. Camt's say better than that.

[An owl on the moon]

Ah, you know my weakness I see... Yes... Neruda is my all time favorite. Just the mention by you makes me smile! Thank you dear friend. May your afternoon give you wings... :)

[Marie]

This is lovely. I like the way the last line and the first are the same, tying it all together.

A poet named James Metcalfe used to write in this form. He published a poem in the paper everyday, and eventually put them in a book. Your poem reminded e so of his work, that I had to go look in my bookcase to make sure he was still there.

[An owl on the moon]

Marie, thank you so much for your words, and your beautiful reflection. I hope you found James waiting on your shelf.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow that opening line is such beautiful sentiment, a great start to an inspiring poem.

[An owl on the moon]

Thank you so much for stopping on over, my good friend!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are very welcome sir.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

So your that man...the man in the moon.....

[An owl on the moon]

I apologize for my delay in giving you thanks, dear poet... I was cleaning up the dark side of my moon...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

not need the pleasure in wonderland excuses your absence:)