of sunsets and similes...

A poem I sent to Alison of A fine frenzy after seeing one of her videos. She was so gracious to respond! Her cd (one cell in the sea) is amazing!!!

OF SUNSETS AND SIMILES...

Like a white rabbit running down a hole,
The sun sets nimbly, green with envy of your soul.
You sweetly wipe the smile off his yellow face,
As he runs to hide in red disgrace.
Your smile is left to illumine the blue night
As it coaxes the moon’s reflected white light...

Reviews

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Love the rhythm and rhyme of this one..I am glad that I chose it to read this afternoon.Great descriptive work..I like the use of the similies...I was delighted that you stopped by my work about the mountain that President Roosevelt used to visit..Our friend died not to long after the trip over there to visit him..Sunflower

[Rye]

Oh WOW!!!
Glad I dug a little deeper here, This is so good. Wonderful poetic words and wonderful flow.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"of sunsets and smiles"
An owl on the moon,
Ah, the moon. This above poem reveals the beauty of design. It sits in the perfect spot and reveals itself to our eyes. we simply see ourselves somehow in it''s glow. A place to dream, to think, to ponder our own lives which are passing but we have so much to enjoy and learn within our days.
Beautiful poem giving a place for introspection.
Blessings,
Kathy

[An owl on the moon]

Oh my, thank you for finding this older piece. I do so love the moon, and am glad to have you by to appreciate my little slice of it... even if it needs to be dusted off a bit! Thanksgiving blessings! :)

[Ashadan]

it is short but I was amazed by it's simplicity ^_^

[Pebbles]

She was a very lucky lady to recieve this ... you could sweep anyone away with your beautiful words ... :) thanks again for sharing

[emmajoy]

A beautiful use of colour-words within poetry, such descriptive phrases.

You've done it again: painted a picture with words!

Thank you for sharing, my friend.

[Kitty]

You've done it again. Another fabulous poem filled with colour and passion...

Josie

[April Child]

Your smile is left to illumine the blue night
As it coaxes the moon's reflected white light.

Lovely piece. The sun setting like a white rabbit running down a hole, such a great image.

[Gildamare]

So beautiful. And I am in love with the word & concept of "Simile"...