magnum opus

today i found

an electric organ

that didn't work, it

just hummed.

i turned it on

and pressed the

keys but it didn't make

a sound, just kept

on humming. i

played some

songs anyway.

tonight i'll pass

out and sleep through

anything.

tonight i'll get drunk

as hell and write

a poem, call it

a magnum opus.

tomorrow i'll be

sick, clammy,

sleeping, puking,

sweating, silent,

nowhere.

tomorrow i'll

be peeing on

the floor, tomorrow

i'll be lying

on the floor.

tomorrow i'll

be making up for

tonight. tonight i'm

not alone, for i'm not

together. tonight

i'm sun, smothered

in a blanket. tonight

i see double,

tonight i feel

triple, tonight i

touch...

tonight i touch nothing.

tonight i heard one of the most

beautiful, most moving

songs. i listened

to it over

and over

again, but i didn't

know the words, so

i just hummed.

Reviews

[Laura E. Aranda]

hmmmmmmmmmm
it was unusual and plain
The first piece I have checked out by you...I will have to read more
Take care, Cheers, Lea

[Bluet_Belle]

I like your formatting. The way you construct your work. I like the message, the depth and complexity within it juxtaposed with the simplistic facade. Great write. I love the last few lines especially.

[G Garcia]

Wow. This is powerful. There's no need to pick it apart or get analytical - it's just honest and moving.

[Legion]

You know, as simplistic as this really is I find a whole world of depth within it. Especially that last line in comparison with the organ. I'm glad I stopped and read this. Such a complex piece with very little. Kudos to you.