death

He promised to stay with me,

no matter what happened,

I wish I could see one last time,

the day go's on with out him,

we made a plan to grow old,

now my life is going no were,

just staying in this moment,

in this time forever,

i said i would die for him,

my life is nothing no more,

no meaning,

no time,

no love,

nothing no more,

he said that he would die for me,

so he did,

a man came for me with a gun,

the bullet came out,

as i opened my eyes i saw him,

dying on thw cold floor,

the man ran,

i stayed,

his last words were,

you said, you said that you would die for me,

but you must live for me to

Reviews

[Midnight_Mask]

great write, I see you've moved your acc to Chelseaa now, so I'll have to catch up on those now :) you're a great writer, post some more please (Y) xD

[Meredith]

You are very good... it is diffrent from what I write so that is why I enjoyed it! Never stop! Keep writing!!!

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

There is very powerful emotion behind this poem...needs a little bit of revision, but still a very nice concept! = ]

[Truth_About_Rain]

Powerful and full of emotion. Especially loved that last line, you put a new meaning to that phrase! At times it doesn't seem to flow as well, but the meaning is there so it's good, nonetheless