heart got broken

best one yet :)

My heart got broken,

nothing else to say,

the words not spoken

not now any way.

my life in pieces,  

like shattered glass,

to scared to move

to scared to talk,

you lose your self,

in the dark.

the death of many,

but some live on,

my heart got broken,

nothing more.

Reviews

[Midnight_Mask]

I can relate, so many times. You've done amazing to make the hairs on my arms prickle. I especially love the way you didn't make it rhyme too much except in the beginning lines, the way you make it halt before continuing creates a harsh feeling, emphasizing pain. Great write ^^

[Ruth]

WHen this happens, what the hell can the soul say to comfort? Powerful! xx

[Truth_About_Rain]

A good rhythm in your poem :D I like your metaphor "My life in pieces like shattered glass" :)

[Mr. Miles]

Borderline cliche and the to should be too, but nevertheless you capture it both universally and personally in a way I can relate to… Thanks for sharing!

[Emily]

you have a great flow to your writing! A lot of times, worse than the hurtful things we say to each other, are the words we leave unsaid. Keep it up!

Just a technical note... should be *too* scared

[chelsea]

i don't know about this poem :/