Beaded Tears

Title pretty much says it!

Beaded Tears

A teardrop weaves its way down my cheek

A frozen beaded, transparent

A salty trail left behind

The only evidence of my sorrows

The planet infested with life

I’m not alone

Another soul is

Crying a beaded tear

A necklace we could make

A lace to strangle those who caused this hurt

Author's Note

A sweet poem and then BAM! a surprise ending! Tell me what you thought!

Reviews

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

I think your right, very sweet with a twist of lime at the end, such a powerful read and good content... I have one recommendation, on the second line you might want to change the word beaded to bead. It flows better and causes the rhythm to remain consistant. Try it outloud first. It sounds better. The poem is Excellent either way, and you are a terrific writter and a great friend!!!!!!

[closed]

great flow. Starts out solemn but presents the message that there are others in the world who share our hurt. :) nice job.

-Dream

[Undying Glory]

wow this sure was intriguing work, although i have to agree with G. K. Bostic here about the Author's Note. you sure know how to write a good ending here! nice work and keep the goods coming!

[Star Bright]

LOVED IT!! Very creative, inspiring, and well-written. (: You are an awesome writer.

[Writer *78*]

Yet another well written poem, absolutely fantasic. I especially liked the ending. When you write these poems they seem to take the reader somewhere emotionally where its rividing. Thats something I try to do as well when I write like this. Great Work!!!

-Fredric Cilbrith III

[Viki Rachel]

I love this poem so much! It shows the sadness a single tear can bring, but you are not alone when you cry. Sadness is all around, an all consuming thing... But the necklace part was definitely my favorite one!

[melissa]

dark i like it:)

[Moflo]

I love it! Your images flow seamlessly like a stream of consciousness, which forms almost a dream like understanding to the words. Great work.

[Kat24]

Hi,
this is really good. Kat24

[HopelesslyDevoted]

the descriptions you use in this have completely blown my mind, what a fairy tale like picture of something sad turned into something beautiful LOVE THIS!!!

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Love it! Nice, soft, sad, and then totally dark!