Quiet Moments

an ABC poem

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Quiet Moments

 

Sunlight beaming through the slanted shutters

Tiny dancing dust particles floating mid-air

Underneath desk a sleeping dog snores

Vanishing baby dreams

In my quiet moments, they haunt me

Reviews

[Gone]

This suggests to me infertility problems "Vanishing baby dreams In my quiet moments, they haunt me" the grieving womb for the child that never was or could be. This is the saddest thing in all creation the woman who desires to bear a child but is unable to. A peaceful and otherwise enjoyable day except for the pain of the unfulfilled womb. This one really hit me. exceptional write.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is beautiful. I love the way the dog snored.
The Motherly instincts are apparent.
Lovely work.

[akapr17other]

I love the...setting I guess you could call it that.

[Zachary_James]

Excellent writing
nothing is better then quiet moments.

[Linear]

In silent slumbers lie all our thoughts all our dreams, disturbed only by the alighting butterfly.

[Mauricio Montoya]

got me thinking actually I could visualize what this piece was describing, Awesome!

[Cynthia]

silence never haunt me, I eager to ahve that moment! I love this poem, its unbelievbly relaxing and beautiful, I wish to live in that house to take my summer breaks! This poem soften my heart, I don't know how to describe that feeling, but it just like blocking myself form the world, and it feeling is like dropping myself into a no one place, and going through what your poem says!

[Coyote Poetry]

I'm not haunted by quiet moments. I yearn for them. I like the vision you create with your words. A quiet and peaceful house with the sound of the normal movement and light. The ending left me with questions. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jessica]

Awwwwwwwh! Your poem is soooooo cute! It is more cute than the kitty ! Your poem is about the details of life in my point of view, but I actually want to ask that what are you writing about? Anyway ,your poem is soooooooooooo good that I am going to learn from you. You are going to see a poem similar to this one after a while.

Great job!
Keep it up!
jessi.

[Moflo]

"Vanishing baby dreams" is the most telling line in this one, and definitely the line that made me re-read the poem over and over looking for another meaning. It is really a very interesting poem, I think its really good.

[bba]

Very good poem! XD I love to have some quiet moments myself...